I only did this because I don't want to start making a long story when I'll just drop it so I'm trying to do a short but good one that I can finish.

I know when I was writing the chapter I felt like the sentences were to long but since it was my first story I was just focusing on spelling

Just me the author shamelessly give myself 5 stars but seriously in reviews give me what you think I need to improve on and what I've done well this is my first story and I'm just trying out my skills.