Sword_Seigneur

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Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
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Big run-on sentence with random commas. Does the grammar improve?
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The Primordial Record
Fantasy · BRICKTRADER
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
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The clogs in his head? I think it’s cogs
Reaching the front gates, Silas stared at the guard for a moment. Syra was about to take out a token of some sort to show the guard, but the moment he looked at Silas, the clogs in his head began to turn, causing him to bow slightly before clearing the path for Silas, his sister, to enter.
Limitless Evolution: The Path To Immortality
Fantasy · Animosity
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Replied to famus_tem
It’s made of 4 1x1x1 cubes. By definition a cube is in cubed units.
His dimensional storage had increased to 2 square meters after the expansion was complete.
Godlike Player in a Game-Like World
Fantasy · GoldenLineage
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Commented
Slight grammar error. It would be “none knows” not “none know” since none is singular and means not one.
"Some of you may have noticed that the rank plates don't indicate your exact level. In simple words, each rank has levels, and to promote from one rank to another, like, from Apprentice Wizard to Arch Wizard, there are five levels in each rank. And for the ranks beyond Arch Wizard, every rank has ten levels. Except for the Supreme Wizard, since none know what lies beyond that.
I Became The Pope, Now What?
Fantasy · MisterImmortal
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Replied to predatorninja2
2 sexes* not genders
There were a significant number of people of all genders. But their clothes could be called uniforms as most of them were similar. The guards had shining silver armour with swords, hammers or lances. The rest of the people wore white, light grey or brown gowns. Some of them had some short, shoulder-length capes around their necks and a golden plate on their chest, tying the red cape.
I Became The Pope, Now What?
Fantasy · MisterImmortal
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Commented
So he can smell emotions?
Sylvester, simultaneously, sensed a familiar smell, one that he smelled the time that Chief Deserte tried to kill him—So bitter… His nose, tongue, and even his breathing felt bitter.
I Became The Pope, Now What?
Fantasy · MisterImmortal
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Commented
You can’t say they are named for no particular reason and then immediately provide a reason…
''Yes. They are named that way for no particular reason. All members of high-level organizations are referred to as shadows. The reason they are called shadows is that they can appear unexpectedly in unexpected places, just like before,'' Belicia explained.
Godlike Player in a Game-Like World
Fantasy · GoldenLineage
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Commented
Unless his dimensional storage is a 2d spade I’m pretty sure it would be 2 cubed meters.
His dimensional storage had increased to 2 square meters after the expansion was complete.
Godlike Player in a Game-Like World
Fantasy · GoldenLineage
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Commented
The comma goes between chubby and sly not between sly and looking.
Han Cai's father was a chubby sly, looking businessman. Who would believe such a fat, sly looking man would be so hard-working. Han Cai was sure even in his earlier life, when he was not 10 years old, he couldn't be as hard-working and committed as his father.
Transmigrated Scoundrel's Exchange System
Eastern · Daoist_Drumstick
Sword_Seigneur3 years ago
Replied to Sword_Seigneur
Meant sly* not shy
Han Cai's father was a chubby sly, looking businessman. Who would believe such a fat, sly looking man would be so hard-working. Han Cai was sure even in his earlier life, when he was not 10 years old, he couldn't be as hard-working and committed as his father.
Transmigrated Scoundrel's Exchange System
Eastern · Daoist_Drumstick