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Grammar makes the story impossible to read, and i tried, shame the plot seemed interesting

Or you could still make the awakening in Wano just changing how it happens

Butting in, and it is a personal opinion but i believe that you should prioritize either a sequence of events or a “mini plot” per chapter so to say instead of fixating on number of words

Just read the available chapters, awesome premisse, and it is looking good! Keep up the great work! It’s good that the MC recognizes his role in this life, usually charactes that are born in positions of power tend to shy away from the responsibilities to live life “the way they want” letting down all the people that depends on them in the process. The hardest thing on writing this fic for me would be tying the awakening of Luffy as Joyboy since there won’t be a Kaido but there is time and i am sure you can make it work somewhere else with somebody else (Since Kaido went after Wano especially because of the prophecy) and would be hard to make him simply go somewhere else due changes in the Wano plot

MC supposedly is a person who wants to slack of but the in first’s chapters already is okay with going after the position of Hokage, it would be understandable if he was just saying so people stopped bothering him but it doesn’t appears to be so

Interesting story though by making his power grow by reaping souls you locked any other form of devolopment by training, what happens when he kills everything in his area, goes somewhere else to exterminate the fauna and/or people? It either makes it seems there are respawns for animals/people or the story is forced in such a way where it becomes a inevitability

Interesting story though being honest the idea of reaping soul “power” gives me the impression of a slash and hack game and i hope it doesn’t force the plot in a certain way to feed into it,

Awesome story though not a fan of the new characters or the way MC abilities will be shared with the crew and that it seems to be diluted by trying to incorporate quincy and hollow powers

Awesome story, though something i noticed in naruto stories is arcs involving trials aways tend to drag on and kind of breaks the pace compared to the other arcs

Sytem, writer forgot or on purpose didn’t put the tag