rrama

I left some reasons in comments 4 and 5. I’m not going to repeat them here—I don’t want to think about this novel again, it just puts me in a bad mood.

I dropped it at chapter 6—it’s not my style. It feels like it has potential, but there are too many flaws that, for me, aren’t acceptable. I left some points for improvement that I noticed in just five minutes of reading. Good luck, and let me know if you rewrite it.

agggh, drop

I’m not sure if this is a translation or an original work, but the foundation of the story has potential. My advice would be to remove the basis of the suspicion—maybe add a moral and identity dilemma when his memories merge as soon as he crosses over, like in other works. Modifying the system could be another area to improve; nobody likes a system that controls the course of the story or the protagonist’s actions. Maybe a system where he earns points to exchange for abilities by improving the fate of the world—not a heroic system, but something more subtle. I’ll keep reading.

I’ll finish reading it, but this part here was too much for me, so don’t expect a good rating. I’m honestly stunned. In the series, they killed the most powerful man in the Seven Kingdoms in terms of political position. The damn Hand of the King read a suspicious book and that was enough for them to kill him—but now some fat idiot, whose death nobody would even care about (technically speaking), claims to know about Jaime’s relationship with his sister and even dares to question a member of the Kingsguard, the son and heir of the most powerful house in the Seven Kingdoms. Come on, seriously? And that earlier dialogue with Tyrion was outrageous too. You can suspect a change in attitude, sure—but what were those lines, as if he already knew he wasn’t his brother? We’re in a medieval setting with almost no history or magic that would allow that. Maybe the Faceless Men—but even that wouldn’t make sense, since there’d be no way Tyrion could have figured that out so quickly.

After reading this chapter, it’s a novel for idiots.

drop

TFTC

It seemed perfect to me until the physical presence of the seven gods; for me, that was a serious mistake. Anyway, thanks for the chapter.