Although the wound on his back is deep, fortunately the blood had dried up or else the journey here, which takes about four hours, would have already taken away his life. (Not criticizing, just saying this makes it flow a little better)

Someone agrees with me 😶

Can’t wait till I can get the rest of the book!

I like your writing style, and the plot so far.

Why was I so unlucky today, first my girlfriend broke up with me, and now I’m being chased by (a grandfather ghost) or (the ghost of a grandfather) Not criticizing, just saying it’s a little easier to read this way, at least for me.

I would suggest rewriting this chapter with someone versed in English grammar, it’s a little hard to read at times, and I’m not sure which tense (past, present, future,) you meant to use, but I believe you used all three, however it’s a good story so far, and I think I will continue to read.

Thank you for not making the main character op. I really don’t like books where the Mc is all powerful or whatever, it makes for a dull book.

Hooray! More dragons! Even if they are evil.

Thank you for the rewrite, definitely spending the credits to get the rest of the book. I think it could go a little more in depth is some places, but is overall a decent book.

Why did you write a review with only emojis?

Well written, elegant and thorough descriptions, a very good book. I would recommend this for anyone who is interested in music, people, romance though that is not the main part of the story, and anyone who likes good literature in general.

Interesting, I like how blunt iris is.

I like the ‘chat’ you add, it adds another dimension, another perspective.

I’m very serious now. Find a publisher. Get those songs published. (And the book)

Well done.

Beautifully described, really amazing writing, I look forward to more books from you, and suggest you get this published.

What a lovely song, have you tried to make a melody for it?