Creative Writer. Novelist. And anything behind the scenes. "I am no critic. I merely reflect on the world through imagination." ig: @eruma_sarushiro
First impression sort of reminds me of the nonfiction novel I read years ago called "the game" by neil strauss. Lots of useful life lessons in here. But, the magic of this story presents itself when the theme suddenly twists into something surprisingly more interesting and enjoyable. Fun MC, well constructed plot, and "Handsomely" done, author-sensei! Keep updating.. really looking forward to this [img=recommend]
Interesting take on the world of organized crime and romance within the gangs of the east coast. The way everything is described seems almost everything lives and breathes. I know not everyone's a big fan of violence, but even that is incredibly graphic to the point where one can feel the actual dreadful sensations.. which is a good thing if we're to set things up for a realistic story revolving the mafia. The pacing is just right that the story develops fast enough for the readers to understand how this magnificent plot is being presented.. not much dialogue in the beginning.. but more well constructed and detailed explanations for viewers to understand the complexity of what is really going on. Overall, the quality of this work is brilliantly done. The author's skill in storytelling has great potential.. and is arguably one of the better ones I've seen in this platform. Great job, author-sensei! Keep updating and inspiring your readers!
whoa. I missed that. thanks! fixed[img=recommend]
glad someone understood what I discretely implied there😅
The story gives one a sense that the world can truly be scary; and that in itself speaks of the author's ingenuity in crafting the cunning world of a real "asian dragon". The characters are well portrayed by the wording. Not to mention, the family dynamics of the Longs and the Xins fit almost perfectly in what the eastern nobility would look like. It's a great read, overall. Every chapter makes the reader look for more information that can potentially destroy each other's adversaries. And oh.. did I mention anything about this story's strong and dominating female lead? Very attractive really.. Keep up the good work, author-sensei! This one has the potential to be up there[img=recommend]
Just about the right mix of fantastical elements and mysterious crime fiction.. Set right at the aftermath of World War II, the narrative does a pretty good job in transporting the readers in a mid twentieth century and gang infested eastern United States through "underworldish" imaginative fantasy. The uniqueness of the story has the potential to be one of those within the top. Keep updating, author! This is a great piece of art.
tbh, transitions are my weak point. currently practicing different techniques on how to improve it. it warms my heart that an established author in this platform took the time to give me a good and honest feedback. so yeah, thanks! and I'll check your work too!
oh no need to say sorry man! good long and honest feedback is what I think I need since I'm just starting to upload my novel. this gives me a really good chance to improve my writing👌
cool man. I really appreciate the time and effort for giving this feedback. thanks! I'll work on it[img=recommend]
thank you for the honest review. I actually really appreciate these kinds of feedback, so I can further improve my work. let me know if you still have something else in mind. I'll try my best to address some issues right away[img=recommend]
oh wow. thanks! fixed it
can't wait bro[img=recommend]