Wouldn't you chose the bloodline first so you can choose jutsu that would go well with it?

I like a strong protagonist as much as the next guy, but at this rate he is going to be beating up Suratobi before he even becomes a genin! You need to slow down the level ups.

If your writing in English, don't just add random Japanese words in that not everyone will understand! Its confusing.

You don't need to put the skill description every time, just put the skill name and level, and how the level up has increase damage etc.

I feel like there should be a bigger level gap than 25 levels between strong genin and week jonin

One time? Whatever you say 😉

I think there is foul play at foot, probably these clan kids 😒

Hi to you too 🤗

Naruto...is that you? 👀

I think it would be better if he didn't get one, being strong without a bloodline would be much more interesting then if he had one, plus if he suddenly had a KG people would start asking questions.

What Bullshit is this! He needs to become a postman if holding letters can give you bonus stats! Probably needs a black and white cat too 🤔

...an Itachi imposter 😱

Kids round my area are chilling in the park, swearing their heads off with a spliff in hand, snorting cocane off the bench, its the new normal! 😂

I thought Itachi also had the system for a second!

I'll be honest, I'm going to drop this, your writing is actually pretty good, but I just don't like your characters, your mc isn't memorable, there is nothing special about him, nothing that makes him stand out personality wise! The slave girls, I don't understand how 2 well off noble families had to sell their daughters into slavery! You need to add some form of explanation to that or it is just unrealistic. As for their personalities, I don't mind the blue haired one too much, her submissive attitude reminds me a little of how koala was when she first joined the sun pirates, though she doesn't quite display the same amount of trauma, or any really. I don't like the red haired one, having a crewmate with an attitude is good, a nami of sorts, but she just comes off as rude and disrespectful to a man who not only saved you, but went beyond what was expected and bought her clothes, food and a place to to spend the night! Being a slave means they will have servitude ingrained into them, any sign of disrespect would have been wipped out early on, but she shows no sign of that! Showing how the two of their characters developed from being slave's, to becoming more confidant and overcame their trauma would have been a great thing to show overtime. I think your writing is good, just a bit of work on your character development and maybe fact check the wiki for some of the Canon characters you want to add, mainly for there age in relation to the timeline, and you could have a really good fanfic!

I can see why he was beaten up, he lost the crew a lot of money.

FFS your a pirate, act like one! He may as well be a marine!

Is Ace even born yet 🤣

I don't like this shiki, he just let's himself be walked over by people he barely knows! Would have rather it just be real shiki with his future memories or something.

You have known these people for 5 seconds, why are you acting so buddy buddy?