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Just finished the 9th chapter. great content that helps portray a version of a continuation. My only feedback would be instead of summerizing What the characters are thinking/doing create it into a dialogue. Like the Conversation with brightblade, much of that content could have been in a conversation between the two, this would help to develop the characters more and push the content at the same time. Keep it up! I’ll be following this version for sure!