YoruOtreu

I really really love this story. It’s worth reading so much. The Art is amazing and the story is so wonderfully crafted with amazing dialogue.

Oh god, that was an intense start

👍

Thank you so much. I’m happy that you enjoyed it! 😊

Good story. I really like the characters and the story, it sort of reminds me of an anime. You can tell you enjoy writing. There are a few mistakes here and there but it doesn’t really detract from the story. Keep working hard!

The story is quite humorous and I think your writing style fits quite well with it. The plot also seems very interesting and I’m already forming theories on as to what is actually happening. I enjoy how blunt the main protagonist is. My one and only recommendation would be that in the earlier chapters the main character would have a thought and then repeat the exact same thing out loud. Sometimes this works but since he’s saying it out loud I find it better to just have the dialogue and add on top of it with the thoughts. Other than that I think you’re doing a good job. I look forward to the author continuing the story.

This chapter was really good, great job

So they’re making ternagers amnesiac and then drafting them to war (if not to a mental hospital)

At least it’s customisable

Son as in *son* or as in a friendly way to refer to him?