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Ayyyy, Don't worry bro, practice makes perfect. This is 👍

this is really good. I stand by my ratings. Some that I have read written by people with English as their first language had worse grammar than this. I recommend you give it a read

bro u are an amazing author. Although sometimes the English gets a little confusing and mixed up its still really good as it gets what you're trying to say across, especially considering its not you're first language, its really commendable that you still choose to write it in English. I also like how you take the time to read through your readers comments. Keep up the good work!

wasn't it 500 before?

when you say "called Grizelle" it sounds like thats the name of the leader and not the magician "called out to Grizelle" makes it easier for English readers understand better what you're trying to say

I just got here! I think this story is great!

Very true

if he created the system why didn't he create unlimited space?

He shouldn't have taught her anything

He should have refused to say as payback for tricking him into giving her a lot of money and her still backstabbing him