Jedidiah_Burney
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Could you at least actually describe the sound? Like this, ShReech! And I suggest that you use more words to describe the sound that it makes. Something like, THUD, BANG, POP, WOOSH, try to imagin the sound in your head and then writing what you would describe as the sound. Like the rooster cock-a-doodle doo. You can write sounds down on paper, try it[img=recommend]
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Don't know why I am replying, but he did make many more mistakes than you mentioned. I am enjoying the book so I don't want to point them out.[img=exp]Main reason for reply[img=exp]
Nice.
I read about 38 chapters, and I think that The writer could do better on the names. Haven't experienced the updates. No idea the timeline there in, nor place they reside. So over all I would say that it is a good novel but the writing needs inprovment. The characters introduced were done well but the naming is cofusing.[img=coins]