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  • Song_ONE2 months ago
    Posted

    So it has a cool idea behind the fic, and a really interesting way of inserting the main character, through a higher dungeon floor, we can see in the first chapters that he is not harmless. the Character Creation thing has a lot of potential though, it has the problem of using a planet buster and make everything boring for the reader. My main problem with this story is the grammar I haven't seen this many mistakes since my last MTL novel just in the first chapters you can see the word adventure repeated a lot of times instead of adveturer or whatever the author was trying to say.

  • Song_ONE3 months ago
    Replied to DrWright

    "Don't apply logic to a FanFic or any fantasy series, you'll kill the entertainment for yourself" Yeah justify your poor writting with this, I mean what's the point of the Titan transformation if the dude wasn't going to destroy the big robot of the end with it, this is like giving candy to a kid just to take it away later. Yeah I guess he destroyed a bunch of robots without powers but it feels cheap either way, the quest of not using powers was lame.

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  • Song_ONE3 months ago
    Posted

    So it's pretty good, the grammar looks good enough and the characters aren't too bad it fails in something, a little thing I guess, the MC was a former assassin and, he gets random powers from animes and he knows every one of them like, dude you are an assassin don't you have better things like cutting throats or something. I know he was supposed to be seventeen but doesn't really feels like an assassin more like an self insert.

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  • Song_ONE3 months ago
    Commented

    The weirdest thing a kid could say to another lmao I could imagine Uraraka in her head thinking something like, dude is stealing candies lol

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  • Song_ONE7 months ago
    Posted

    Honestly this makes me feel weird, the develpment of the story isn't the best, the MC hides his powers just because he feels like it, the reason the author give us for that is cheap. Anyway the idea around the story is really creative and a cool idea you can find interesting things in the story but the way the caracthers interact it's also cheap they don't feel alive they feel like bad written villains I think the authors take too much of Xianxia shit because everyone feels like a young master even more the prodigies I can recommend the story and tell you all to give it a try to write your own conclusions but it fails to deliver a lot.

  • Song_ONE7 months ago
    Commented

    This chapter has a lot of grammar mistakes

  • Song_ONEa year ago
    Commented

    Sigh the most used cliche in fate fics, why did you all bother. Him being a troll is fanon

  • Song_ONEa year ago
    Commented

    A cool start, people whining about him being a human what did they expect an Eldar? Let's see how the story builds itself this chapter is an excellent introduction

  • Song_ONE2 years ago
    Posted

    This should have AU in the title I wanted to see the IMPERIUM of man not a bastardized version of it, I mean the 40th millennium and all that. It doesn't really feel very 40k, I thought it was going to start at the unifications wars it could have been more interesting than a huge steamroll of empire. It can be interesting but not my cup of the tea Edit: So my review it's my own personal view don't let you be discourage to read, It's very interesting and very well writing if you are willing to give it a try