Raven_Diamond

I love the poem at the start. I haven't seen a lot of stories that do that. The premise of the story is interesting and the intro shows how the statue has developed into something more than it was. There is a bit of lore/info dump, but nothing too egregious. The characters are pretty clear and the pace seems to be good. I would say to give this one a read.

This story is pretty straight forward and dives into the action and character descriptions. There are some grammar issues and telling vs showing, issues that can easily clear up as the story continues. It is unique in the fact that it reads like a script at times, with only minor repetitive phrases. Overall, interesting portrayal of a story.

This story wastes no time getting into some adult action, which can be more enjoyable for the male audience or those who want a more erotic read. It is more tell than show and not a lot of emotional stuff to delve into (granted emotional caters to a different audience, so just depends on the demographic the author is shooting for). There are some grammar issues and head hopping. There are hints at other fantasy's the character has, which is common in certain animes (again could be playing more towards male audience and this move would make sense). You get a good feel for what the female characters look like, only a bit of white wall syndrome with the males (easy fix as they grow as a writer). There are a lot of cliches, not a bad thing just something to know as that might be exactly what you're looking for or it may not. Overall, I think this will be either a hit or miss depending on your individual reading tastes/preferences.

A very well written start. The characters are very distinguishable from one another and have chemistry. Only a minor typo that may just be due to how the platform formats things. The scenes are very clear; not overly descriptive, but no white wall syndrome either. It does have the usual tropes for this sub-genre, but I'm interested to see how the author continues to breathe life into it. Overall, worth a read.

It's a good concept and start, though a bit wordy at times. The synopsis, though repetitive, does draw you in. The characters are a little clichéd, but that's par for the course of this genre and to be expected. I anticipate they will become more defined and mature over the course of the series.

Yep, post rapture.

Very well written, clear characters, and most likely a seasoned writer/author who knows how to draw you in. It’s easy to see the settings and immerse yourself in this world. Something you should read if you have a chance.

It's a good start and the grammar isn't too bad. The chapters are a decent length and the ending of the first chapter does make you want to keep reading. It tends to Tell vs Show quite a bit, but that's easy to fix and should resolve as the author really gets into the heads/mannerisms of their characters.

Hey, shameless author here. Just writing to say I hope you enjoy the story and any feedback is welcomed. I had to give a rating to write this, so yeah, I'm gonna be biased and rate high.

Hey, shameless author here. Just writing to say I hope you enjoy the story and any feedback is welcomed. I had to give a rating to write this, so yeah, I'm gonna be biased and rate high.