Madeline not Elisabeth

Madeline should be bit assertive

sister is good and jealous at the same time... wanting Elisabeth to be in her shadows

just love the buil-up

Hooke! already!![img=coins]

ahem ahem!

can imagine her state after seeing the man 😉

Your opinion is totally fine and same holds for mine. As I said, you wrote about PTSD and that's brave. Does it make the novel boring? I didn't say that so that's your interpretation or perception of what I said. I read the novel because I appreciated the theme you took. I was disappointed as it didn't go well with me and so I mentioned in my comments. If you are unable to take that or see a reader's point of view that's your prerogative. As for the ML, yes, he is shown to behave differently but as one who cares as much as shown for the FL, his treatment of special moments should be different. That is how human mind is whatever the person's personality and that's where the story didn't treat it well or in line with the character but since you wrote the story, possessiveness towards one's own viewpoint is acceptable. As for mental illness and related, there are many things in the story that are not in line with behavioural traits of such a patient but again, this being a fictional story can be let go as liberty to the writer. Happy that many find the FL's character similar to theirs and that would be true to girls (and boys) facing such issues across the world - I don't see myself taking that away from the story in any of my comments - again that is your perception and interpretation of my comments. Enough said, I have commented as I felt after reading the story and clarified to your comments as well. How to take them is up to you, I would be unable to reply to further comments and pen down here. Best luck :)

I am Indian and find the depiction very disappointing as today's girls, especially educated ones are different from what is portrayed in the novel. About PTSD or related disorders, lot of detail is mentioned which doesn't make the approach broad-minded. Yes, brave of you to put it in the story but definitely too much attention and melancholy in the story. A psychologist myself, I can appreciate the detail but that's that. About consummation of marriage, yes, you didn't write in the story but the time which is there at the end, it was not special considering the way the ML talks total unromantic stuff during the intimate moments making it look BAU which doesn't fit well with the story. About not writing R18 content, that's ok but not depicted nicely. Was reading your story especially due to the story but was disappointed and pointed out. If I want chicklit stories, have many avenues and definitely not comparing this to them as both are different genres as per me. The opinion is mine based on general and professional experience of many yyears and you may take it as you want