Gavyn_Mack

Overall this story is interesting, and while it may have a few problems ( which we will talk about), it still manages to feel unique and simple. Now from what I've noticed, the story could be a bit slower, and the reason I say this is because sometimes there's a disconnect/jump that happens decently quick, but more importantly because I Think the characters need to be fleshed out more. so in summary, you should make the story slower, so you can flesh out the characters more and make it flow more smoothly (if that makes sense 😅) but keep up the good work. you're doing great 👍 The story is worth the read

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thanks for the chapter

is there actually a faction of humans that fight for/work with the bugs, or is this just original? also enjoying the story so far 👍👍

well you have my support, I like what you've made and I can't wait to see what will happen next.👍👍👍

honestly, this story has a lot going for it, but the writing isn't good, it needs a lot of improvement.

in reality, it took only 3 chapters for the MC to join the vault hunters and kill the destroyer, a lot of the chapters before that weren't focused on the vault or the destroyer. Anyways I think, you just got to flesh out the characters more. A lot of the interactions feel fake and forced, and combine that with certain situations that happen pretty fast, makes it pretty hard to believe and understand how things happened. Also, you could detail fights and actions a bit more. I guess what I'm trying to say, is that you're going through scenes really fast, and without much detail, so it makes it hard to understand and keep track of.

This story is a lot of things, and slow paced is not one of them, while the story is...... interesting, it also lacks in a few areas. The story is decently fast paced and sometimes the way things are worded makes it hard to keep track of what's going on. things happen way too fast in my opinion. Also the chapters are pretty long, which is great. in conclusion this story has a lot of potential, give it a shot. Just don't expect it to be......... perfect

honestly, the story so far is good, so thanks for the chapter author....