Nyxus_

A pleasant read so far, good pace of progression, with world and character's being filled out sufficiently.

Very good story line, well written, looking forward to the rest of it

It's all a bit disjointed with time skips, dreams, memories and characters that are never explained.

lunged at her

Very well written, looking forward to the rest of it.

He is our target?

a bigger rather than the biggest

burble?

It's a bit all over the place, without any explanation as to why things happen the way they do.

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