Dmanga_lover
Aspiring author and manga artist.
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I do revise it. It's just that some mistakes will slip by no matter how many times you edit it.
The MC is way too realistic đ€Ł
this guy is a giga incel despite being so young
never ask "what could go wrong?"
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well, that was fast....
what about family? You know, the people you're supposed to love unconditionally?
Ok, this was fun, but the writing leaves a lot to be desired. A lot of details are missing which makes it impossible to immerse in the story. The plot is obviously a SAO parody, which is fine, put the potential is lost because of the writing. I recommend you read more professionally edited works instead of the webnovels with horrible grammar and sentence structure. You'll also need to work on your English a little more.
Where did this come from?