Brad_Michaels

I Liked the story so far, there is a vague goal and that is to be expected as it is still early in the story. certain events or people would only further cement what the goal was. this allows us to explore the world and intent and changes with the MC. i dont think this needs a rewrite. maybe just some editing.

Overall this is a very well put together story. I am interested to see where this goes both on a power building scale and romance direction. I really hope this author sees this through to the end with at least the quality that has been shown.

I have finished reading it all and I have to say I was thoroughly impressed. Even the reason why he had all the knowledge was explained and that tid bit was great foresight. The passing could have been better but that is my only complaint. Very good story