Mell_FLouis
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I like the way that the first chapter is essentially focused on Benjiro’s day to day, and within that we get specific details about the kind of person he is and some nice characterization. His interaction with the girl was silly but interesting, and I also think it did a lot to reveal context for her personality as well! Like what the other reviewer mentioned, it might be good to update more regularly. Overall, I like it!
Thist story is pretty interesting! I like how we’re immediately introduced to the main character, we know how she feels, what she wants, and what she doesn’t want. I also like how we already know what her internal conflict is—obligations to her pack versus her own desire for a normal lifestyle. This is cool so far!
Biased review from the author here! :) The MC, Hana, struggles a lot more than your average "fall into another world" MC usually does because of her internal struggles being intensified by the strange circumstances she finds herself in. The world around her is odd, horrific, and beautiful all at once, but Hana just feels disgusting, all the time. Her insecurities flare and she lashes out in anger, sadness, rage, all of it. I hope you follow me on the journey of Hana as she tries to stumble her way back home and leave the mystical world she's been thrown into!