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Brett_Knox

Brett_Knox

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I'm flattered you clicked on me, i'm not too interesting but feel free to look at my comments and read some of the amazing novels on here.

2020-02-05 JoinedUnited States
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  • Brett_Knox
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    It was such a pity that the appeal for campus research grant had fallen through, where he lacked the funding to market his invention.
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    48 Hours a Day
    Sci-fi · Little Bleary Zhao
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  • Brett_Knox
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    bruh why are all the characters racist towards Asians in this? I'll assume this is a fantasy universe thing and not an assumption of how it is in reality in ny.

    Ch 34 Chapter 34. Pop's Barber Shop
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    Marvel: Infinite Possession
    Anime & Comics · BingeFics
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  • Brett_Knox
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    bruh what

    "Hey, kid, this isn't a place for someone of your skin colour to be."
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    Marvel: Infinite Possession
    Anime & Comics · BingeFics
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  • Brett_Knox
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    What, did you expect me to deny that? Real life's boring. Sue me.
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    This is a Beta Test?! - A Literally Broken System
    Video Games · ChellyArks
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  • Brett_Knox
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    A/N: Mc is not gay. It was made clear in the later chapters. He just flirt with da homies in one chapter.
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    Swordsman System In Naruto
    Anime & Comics · Thy_Holiness
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  • Brett_Knox
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    I recommend heavily working on Grammer or using a website to assist you. other than that think about what a real person would say in a conversation because as of rn all of your interactions feel forced and unrealistic.

    Ch 2 CHAPTER - I ( Edited )
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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
    Anime & Comics · Xuefang1
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  • Brett_Knox
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    Commented

    the character interaction seems very unnatural and forced.

    Ch 2 CHAPTER - I ( Edited )
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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    can I ask where you were and what happened?

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
    Anime & Comics · Xuefang1
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  • Brett_Knox
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    to get harry osborns attention.

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    snapper. I then grabbed

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    off the bus. I stretched

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    on a rock. when we got

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    you can leave now. your shuttle is departing soon. "

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    he said as he handed me a hunting knife

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    since you learned well and followed my orders well I got you this ...

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    proud to have taught you. you...

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    punctuation makes this sentence feel clearer even if you don't change the wording. it makes the speech feel like multiple sentences with pauses which is realistic instead if a run-on sentence that comes off unnatural and confusing. :)

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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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  • Brett_Knox
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    Commented

    periods and commas are very useful. when you end a sentence and want to add more information use the period or a semicolon. if you end a sentence but the sentence feels incomplete then use the comma with a word or words that attach the two bits Like " but, thought,as well, ect.".

    Ch 1 PROLOGUE ( Edited )
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    THE GAMER : MARVEL X DC ( AU )
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    I'm Finn Mertens and I've Become a Player!
    Anime & Comics · EldarGlorfindel
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  • Brett_Knox
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    Commented

    read immortal hulk

    (I checked, wtf I didn't know this)
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    Marvel: Meditation System
    Anime & Comics · Alcoholic_Panda
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