Too many authors/translators in the past have done what you're suggesting and picked up a second project. Too many have realized that, after they did so, the increased workload was too much for a balance in their life. This leads to them dropping both works altogether and not finishing anything. Burnout hits everyone at some point and I don't want to see that happen to you with a fic that I'm enjoying. Please don't pick up a second project.

I'm talking about Snape using Legilimency.

Yikes. McGonagall would never react that way to an ILLEGAL activity. Yet another inconsistent portrayal of characters from the author. I sincerely hope you brush up on the individual characteristics of the characters so you can have realistic conversations that are actually believable.

This is now less a story and more a journal with summarizations as to what happened. I find myself disappointed that the author is putting little effort into making the story flow with actual character conversations. There are many methods to deliver information naturally with a story progression rather than deliver it in summarization format which is very boring to read. It feels like a report rather than a story.

Yes killed by soundwaves from an electrical strike. Makes sense.

Seriously? That's what he says? Also where are the quotation marks? Please at least put some effort into the grammar.

I don't know how to feel about this chapter. Disappointed I guess. This is supposed to be a 1st gym badge which would be the easiest difficulty. Using combo moves, altering the terrain, using the ice to easily maneuver all should be something gym leaders don't expect until the 4th or 5th badge level for rookies based on my understanding of the world. With all that said, Brock has upped the difficulty to an extreme for the first badge with this fight.

I see. I didn't know such a person existed. Thanks for the information.

Please please please edit the name Hercule. It's incorrect. If you're trying to name him after the son of Zeus from Greek mythology, it's Hercules! I can't continue to read this if you're going to butcher the name continuously.

I really don't like the 4 moves limit during battle. I get you're trying to come across as it's for the rookies to learn. In reality it feels forced and doesn't make any sense.

Why wouldn't he be able to sell gold and ornaments? Doesn't make sense.

Please remove the hyphens and google correct usage of hyphens.

Instead of look, which refers to seeing with eyes, the word sound would fit much better as this sentence refers to him speaking which means he would hear it out loud to know it didn't SOUND like English or Japanese.

Slytherin makes the most sense if his goal is to breach the divide between houses in my opinion.

Again, this conversation would be held in the first year group waiting to be sorted as Rigel would be sorted before both Harry and Ron. Neville would be sorted already due to being a Longbottom.

I think the author forgot that the first years are all called in alphabetical order according to their last names. First up would be Hannah Abbott while the last would be Blaise Zabini. Rigel would most certainly be sorted before Harry Potter.

Personally, the author should edit this chapter to remove all reference of first years as freshman. Never once were they called this in canon. The nickname given to them was 'firsties' by older students. As for upper years, they were always referred to strictly by their year. The only exceptions would be students taking OWLs and NEWTs in their fifth and seventh years.

This reply makes no sense... Seriously read this previous section out loud. Who would reply with "Oh."

What a ridiculous statement and hardly believable.

When you end a sentence, you use a period, question mark, or exclamation point immediately after the last word. There isn't a space between the last word and the question mark as the author has done repeatedly.