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She seduced him? Oh come oooon! It's always the lady's fault with some men. But he has the spirit of beautiful ladies tempting him. That's not his fault, right ?
That's sooooo not how to enjoy a novel. At least the author should proofread it or get someone to.
Being HIS GIRLFRIEND not being her boyfriend
This cannot be typo. It happened too many times. Author should proofread work.
Hmmm! You mean you've not reread your work? Disappointed. when you say child, you mean ONLY ONE. but if quadruplets, then they are children. You've been making references to and mentioning child for a while now. Then you interchange when you should say children with child. So it makes it difficult to follow. At a point, you said daughter instead of daughterS (emphasis on S to mean more than one). Did I need to spell this out for you? Please read the last two chapters to see what I am saying. Because of that, it may be confusing on whether to settle for one daughter/child or many daughters/children.
Please check the grammar her. Then, 'you aare my brother ' not my sister if it's Matheo speaking.
I think author should try to help readers know when a paragraph ends or when the previous narrative ends and another begins. This doesn't flow . It's like cut and paste.
never GOOD enough
Now four children?Please stop confusing the readers.
Hmmm! Got tired of correcting. Author had a daughter in mind after writing chapter 1.
Author, it seems you wrote this with only one child in mind, later changed it but not the tenses that go with the change.
His child? I thought there were 4 (children)?
what 'transpired' here...
Author, last line is not visible.
I hope you're not contradicting yourself You said his weight on the bed made her 'rollover' to him/his side. Implying the bed wasn't wide though soft. Now She moves away leaving a huge gap between them. How? She shouldn't be able to do that since she could roll over to him again because the bed is soft and his weight will deep the bed (like a hammock).
😲😲😲😲😯 you raised your hand on someone who hasn't offended you? Someone older too? How shameless.
You let your daughter go settle a score? 🤔🤔🤔
He BARELY saw her cry.
Is it the womb or the pregnancy?
And it is not an idiom.