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jami_payne

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  • jami_payne
    jami_payne5mth
    Commented

    Just wondering if the other 2 chapters where going to be released?

    Ch 32 Treat You Like Glass
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    Gears (Book 1 Savage Creed MC)
    Urban · Allison Kayne
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  • jami_payne
    jami_payne10mth
    Posted

    Bdsm is not my thing and neither is real world romance but this book was very good and kept my attention the entire time. I highly recommend!

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    You Are Mine
    General · Leann Lane
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    jami_payne1yr
    Commented

    Jumping 20 to 30 feet is cool and all but realistically he would have never saw the gloves that were that high. The average story in a building is about 14 feet so 28 would be on the top of the second story. So he would be jumping to reach the third floor of a building to get a pair of gloves

    Ch 11 Arena
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    The Invincible Full-Moon System
    Fantasy · Mrboogey13
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    jami_payne1yr
    Commented

    The Eiffel Tower is only 330 meters high. A 1000 meter wall would be infeasible and would fall over with a good storm. That’s why sky scrapers sway.

    Ch 20 Pawn Vampire
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    The Invincible Full-Moon System
    Fantasy · Mrboogey13
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    jami_payne1yr
    Posted

    This would be a great story if it was in order and there wasn’t repeat chapters. I wouldn’t waiste your coin because you might get mad when you figure out you paid for a new chapter and it’s on you already read. An this isn’t a one time time it’s a rear thing.

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    His Rogue Luna
    Fantasy · Goddess-Of-Dawn
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    jami_payne2yr
    Commented

    I feel the story would flow better if you used names instead Of discribing them by looks. It’s a hard to keep up when I have to stop and think who’s red head and who’s Japanese?

    Ch 7 6. This is Tom
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    My Demon
    Fantasy · GwenCreepy
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  • jami_payne
    jami_payne3yr
    Commented

    This is a bit confusing. You reffernce a sentence up that lilly saw Dawn on His arm but not Then state after that that she saw him and that her plan worked. She had seen him already.

    Lily Wyatt rose from her place upon hearing the footsteps. She looked back and her eyes narrowed when she saw that Dawn was hung over Daryn's arms. She ignored her and looked at Cole. He was looking like such a fine boy. His sharp features were prominent and she couldn't help but admire the cleft in his chin, just like her son. Then she saw Daryn with surprise. Her trap had worked well. 
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    The Silver Crescent Alpha Prince
    Fantasy · MishaK
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