chinese concept..first thing that comes to the head of an US ex army girl. so forced

gud novel, gud translation, hopefully no harem nor lemon...need a lot more of that. big thx!

your program's bugging again bru^^

happy :o

this thing makes me laugh a lot. the quality is bad, the name/gender often wrong, some dialogues doesnt mean shit like a good mtl...but even that cannot remove the fun of it. a good surprise.

destroyer for a hero?

tony stark..proly the only person who cant dodge crisis due to his own rashness even with plot armor.

you should lower your use of foreshadowing. its ...really bad as it is. Crisis feels artificial, whats with everytime the biggest problem is the one accounted for? wtf bro? Everyone know jake is controlled but it still become THE probleme? just..no, its bs. Still have a good time but i tell you, i skip a lot of content, like 20 chapters all at once to get to the interesting part like i went from her being shot to jake breaking free...so all that work between was for naught, and all fillers and repetition of info dump stuck in important moment...learn to balance the rythme, its a real problem for me and theres an aftertaste of scam that is real bitter. when theres 3 chapter about bello thinking about his skills in war, or 3 chapter per skill of ghost saving the days...cheh

jaune mean yellow and colors arnt used in french name...her name was Jeanne d'Arc.

you should lower the use of name calling while talking to each others, its too unnatural

luffy doesnt get the 3d2y message without ace so why would they train 2years... did i skip the explaination?

ty

yeah its a good start dont stop :o

theres a problem tho, 10% of the novel is fighting >.<

some typo and some unintresting para every other chapter. The story have a 40K vibes that is hard to ignore and it feel it started as a fanfic. The feel is like a robot taizen OG team in 40k/mass effect. it is what i needed.

wb !!!

door door and calm calm for the fruits, dont remember the original name

put them in diablo, despaiiir

Nimpo Hiruzen no Ougi : Go with the flow ! "Mada Mada !!! Combined " ; Jiji special Henge no jutsu ; agreeing smiling old fool ! "Jiji-senjutsu : Fusion skill : Tell everything to jichan, no holding back !"

thor no you should call me thor no you should call me thor...it deserve a re-read lol