Sir_Alvindor

3 years

Two years.

Gustav is so powerful he cannot be contained within one novel.

It's been a year. :(

The plot development was what I was most worried about and was pleasantly surprised. This chapter contained a number of important incites that made it feel realistic. My only complaint is there are some parts of the writing that could have been written better. There are some spelling mistakes or the uses of adjectives that added nothing to the writing. Additionally, the presence of events was rather bland, feeling more like a list than a dynamic narrative. While I appreciate the speed of the chapter releases, I think you might want to take a little more time proofreading your chapters. Just some food for thought, not trying to be overly critical.

I haven't read what you've written yet but maybe you should create a discord. Tom was always great about being indirect and unpredictable, never falling into the cliche of a character developing a power and then immediately using it to clinch victory in the next fight. If a few people get together to brainstorm, we might be able to preserve some of that and help plan far enough ahead that the plot remains complex but easily understandable.