It is a fun read with interesting characters. The only thing is I hope the updates remain stable.

Writing quality- the quality was above average for a fanfic. No major errors and is a quality read. Update stability- I wish it updates more but it's a fanfic authors so my expectations were low. The story development- I like the direction of the story but I hate how weak the mentality and lack of foresight. I know it's suppose the show his growth but there doesn't seem to be a reward for his progress other than gym badges. Every time he goes exploring he almost dies everytime. Some scenarios aso seem forced and the probability of it happening is so low. Character design so far is mid but he left room growth so he might grow on me. World background is solid with some sus parts.

One of the best one piece fan fiction on this site.

The story is a hidden gem. I don’ t know how I haven’t read it until it was finished. The premise of the story didn’t attract me at first but since it was complete I decided to read it and omg it was one of those rare moments where I binge through the whole story without stop. I literally didn’ sleep the whole night. The story was kinda iffy but just made sense somehow and even if he did things I didn’ like I still couldn ’t hate his character. I also learned he did 2 chapters a day for his first fanfic and finished it which would be automatic 5 stars. There was nothing to complain about for grammar but I was to ingrossed in the novel to notice probably.

+1

While year?

The writing quality is solid The updating speaks for itself The story is still at the beginning and so far just been him training but I look forward to his influence on the world. I also feel the interaction with other characters is fine but could use more development. The character and world background are great. In conclusion the story is just beginnin but it is a solid read

Doing great so far.👍 Hope you update more🧎‍♂️.

I don’ t know how it took so long for me to read this book. Definitely a hidden gem. The mc really stands out compared to other Mc. I like how normal but overpowered he is. Few plot holes like his sharingan evolution ut still readable and easy to ignore. The story is very well done with plenty of side character development which makes the story come to life and makes you feel imersed. The way he gained strength is very elementary and I feel there is a lot of things in the Naruto world he can take advantage of. The pacing of the story is also very well done and just makes me want more. I also like Mc’s character development with all the hardships he goes through.

This so far is the best one piece fanfic I’ve read in a while. The character development is amazing and how every character in the crew has their own thoughts and personality rather than blindly following the mc. The Mc is also expertly portrays what an average guy going into one piece more than likely will think. Also the usual MC is portrayed as mysterious and are cool on the outside but a mess in the inside, but here the crew are smart and knows the true MC which helps the mc’s character develoent The updating is also great but leaves you wanting for more. The story so far is just starting but I look forward to the high level fights like musashi vs Mihawk or admirals. The author also writes a lot of non mainstream things that keep the story fresh and new. The world of one piece also allows plenty of original things you can write.

The story is great but the character and story is mid. The author created an OP character but wants him to struggle way to much. If you want to make it interesting you should make him limit himself not fucking the power he used. Like crystal release with diamond defense with tenseigan vision with wood release that is more diverese than hashirama with mangekyo sharingan not to mention platinum magnet and blood release barely beat the third raikage. Bro pretty much had the same start as both hashirama and madara combined plus more but how can he be weak af when he is already an adult. The only reason Im super mad is because I feel he is disrespecting how op the powers are themselves. I don’ care what you do with the mc but the powers need respect Any of the powers he used should be able to allow him to beat the third raikage or not struggle like he did. not to mention all of them combined.

I always wanted to read a how to train your dragon fanfic and this story is great so far. I hope you keep writing as you are doing awesome so far.

The only reason this novel has good ratings is because all the people who review are just itachi simps.

I only made it through 14 chapters before I felt the need to write a review. First off the grammar quality is bad but readable. Second the mc started practicing cultivation techniques from memories he absorbed but then doesnt use them but uses shinobi jutsu instead. Then he created akatsuki cloak which just killed the novel for me as It is kinda like Naruto’ s come kill me orange jacket. The akatsuki cloak was only cool because of the reputation of the people who wore them if they didnt have the reputation of being strong almost every bounty hunter would be going for them especially how much the cloak stand out.

Idk sounds like a good idea but hard to implement. I feel like it good make or break the novel

Thanks for the chapter. I feel like the end is near which makes me 😭😭. I feel he has no real competition anymore but I still look forward to the future chapters.

I was reading it originaly because I liked the concept of the system and coudn’t wait for him to show off and was initially satisfied but ended up just enjoying the world building as there was very little character development and plot. The story was initiall interesting in the beginnin but became boring later on. Overall the story was sub par but the world building was top tier.

I like the concept of the story by adding some chineese or cultivation concepts to it but my time was just wasted as the translation was sub par and the concepts just conflicted to much with the original naruto world for me. I hope if you continue or start another fan fic you can consider start of with the perspective of someone in the world your writing about and make the mc and story to where it makes sense if you are someone from that world or culture.

The story is amzing but I think the mc design is more amazing as it really shows how I think a modern person would act like in a cultivation world. I like how patient and how he can hold himself back and stay calm especially with all the xianxia troupes.

This book is amazing with story develpoment and design with good Pacing making me want more. It makes me impatient and just want there to be more chapters.