we will see 😁

insane !!!

hello, what i'm going to write and say are just tips that i think will be useful to improve this story. I read a lot of novels and mangas which are both excellent and bad. I then wondered why some market and others not. I learned that the emptying of information was situational, that is to say that the information given to us serves the present moment therefore easier to understand. In this fan-fiction and even in several fan-fiction, even if we know the powers and rules of the fan-fiction because we know the original story, the authors give us their information without any reason. For my opinion, I think you gave us his information to make us understand that he knows the world of Hunter x Hunter but there is another way to make us understand that he knows this world. The other way for me, is to describe the place of residence, he lives in Meteor City, show us that he lives there with the specificity that Meteor City has shown in the manga. Then it's the MC, the MC is quite interesting and ambitious but at the same time not interesting. Let me explain, telling us the general objective of the character is good but telling us all its little details that I must be friends with this one or kill this one is not interesting, show it to us. I don't like to hear the thoughts of the characters, I rather prefer to see their actions so that I can understand their thoughts for myself. Now let's talk about the Hunter x Hunter fan-fiction part. I have read several Hunter x Hunter fan fiction and have noticed that many authors have failed to capture the essence of Hunter x Hunter, the fighting. From my understanding the fights in Hunter x Hunter are separated into 2 parts: - The physical part where you use the power of your Hatsu to win. - The reflection part where we try to decipher the opponent's Hatsu to win. And it is this second part that many authors forget. To work on this second part I advise you to review his first fight against the Ancient. I don't take into account the second fight against the elder because the MC won only thanks to his improvement of his Hastu and not by understanding in depth the Hastu of the Elder. Here I hope it could help improve this story because I read it myself and I want to read a better way of it.

I also found that it lacks a sense of danger. That is to say that the danger is present, explained, and understandable but only for the characters. The characters live in a supernatural world and it's conscious of things. But we were aware of nothing! We do not see the danger, we are not shown it. I will take the example of the attack on the father of Isaac. I would have preferred to see the father get killed because it would have been more impactful. Basically, its lack of action represents the level of strength of all the characters to get an idea of the danger.

thanks for the chapter

The story is great but I feel like the plot isn't progressing. Nothing really important happens or it's not enough to demonstrate. I think there's a little too much suspense and not enough response.

Thx 🙏

I give you real advice on how to improve your story and learn to appreciate MC more because for me MC is bland. The only thing that can make him interesting is the body's past that he has. Realize that your character has no development and what will he bring in the life of vampires? Now I give you some advice that for me can really improve your MC and your story: When the MC reincarnates in the body of the werewolf because the original guy dies and he kills all the villagers and he stays in the village leaves guilt and tries to forgive itself in their grave but staying in the same place, where the remorse started for years does not destroy its guilt all at once. So if we had to explain to us why he remains at the scene of the crime !! Is it a self-inflicted punishment etc. It adds depth to the MC. The idea of ​​the nearby village helping her get back to life is a good idea, but not enough use. The MC comes from the modern age and reincarnates into the modern age and in a supernatural village. Normally such a village must have a custom, a tradition which can help the MC to let go of his guilt and which really attaches him to the village to the point of entering into a war with a cannibal village. Now his wolf, as I understand his wolf, is the original werewolf. Now how is it that he manages to get it under control over time !!? It sucks you had a real free field to force him to accept his wolf side and be more savage and proud and with the village allow him to awaken spiritually and communicate with his wolf. Here I hope I gave you some new ideas for the continuation of your story.[img=recommend]

thx for chapter !!!! I think it's cool that he's becoming more and more OP thanks to his own efforts, but I'm asking how are the fights going to be now? We all know that our enemies and the battles we all expect are against the blessed. Would it also be one-sided like with Long Chen? Because I would like the fights to be EPIC even if the blessed ones will not be as OP as the MC. Because it is necessary not to lie, a blessed one is always a hero of his generation. A hero who must make the MC EPIC. I hope I won't be disappointed !!!

thx !!!

I find your idea very well that he does not have all the powers at once and that his comes little by little but if there is one thing that I do not understand and why does he have to go to the army to have the super soldier serum ?? If I understood correctly he has access to a library which gives him access to all the knowledge of the Universe offered by his Mother and that he is more intelligent or a faster understanding than the others and that he will inherit from the business the other con. So why, with all his tools at his disposal, must he go to the army to wage war, suffer to have a serum that he can create himself?

pity oh great author !! Don't leave us with such a chapter !!! 😭😭😭😭

thank

The chapters are too short !!!!

more! more! more! PLEASE !!!!!!

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

Supernaturel

I don’t think it’s easier to write. On the contrary, I think it's more complicated. Because as we know The Goblins are a race which mainly works on ***, stealing and fighting. Now if I continue my idea, for me a real MC Gobelins must have the same faults as his race so the *** of the Gobelins is rape towards women because it is a Gobelins, the destruction of the village, the cruelty to the state pure, therefore a real monster who does not conform to the moral code. Because a real monster has no moral code. So those is not easy to write it down.

good novel so far. But I hope you wouldn't make the same people happy as the other novelists at MC Gobelins. Who dares to introduce human behavior and logic to Goblins who are barbaric, bloodthirsty, destructive and mad with lust but who in the end changes all of history because instead of having a Goblins we have a green-skinned super human? is all. I hope that even with his disciplined skill he will accept his Goblin nature and abandon his human morals which are of no use to a Goblin.