Arch_Angelcakes

He forgot blood manipulation, daze mental manipulation, and body puppetry.

I honestly don’t understand why he didn’t just take Alec from the start. MC new he’d be helping the Volturi later so it wouldn’t effect the war if he saved Alec for Jane from the start.

They explain everything in the next chapter.

Is the MC a half-blood like Renesmee? Or maybe a quarter-blood? It would explain why he can eat so little while still possessing inhanced senses and not dying after eating so little. Also, if he’s a quarter vampire that would explain why he doesn’t need blood or spark slightly.

Didn’t the story say he ended up in 2011 during the first few chapters? Especially since he realized he’s in Marvel due to finding news articles about Iron Man 1 & 2 as well as the Hulk. Is this just an accidental plot hole?

He doesn’t even need his space powers for this. He could just have Gear covertly hack and transfer illegal funds from shell accounts the gangs own.

The idea is good, but the execution is poor. I stuck with it for a while hoping the writing would improve, but the story consistently reads like a narrator’s monologue most of the time. The story descriptions are often vague and give random info about the future that isn’t relevant at the time. There is also little to no character depth.

I honestly really loved this until it got to the insane werewolf BS. That part kinda ruins it for me, but it was really good up till that point.

The story itself is written well and has a steady flow with any of the nonsensical plots a lot of HP fics have. However, despite the MC saying he’s going to go against Dumbledore, he only tried once in 31 chapters then gives up. He just decides not to challenge him “for now” despite the fact he never even tries to challenge him before then and instead goes along with Dumbledores plans. MC is literally from one of the most noble wizard families and doesn’t even bother trying to use his family influence aside from telling his Gran about the troll after Halloween. Also, even after knowing Dumbledore used memory charms on everyone so they didn’t remember he had an unforgivable curse cast on him, he doesn’t even bother sending a letter to his Gran.