lil_bitch

Why would he do that?

What did he reply to?

Next chapter when?

Nice chapter. Don’t get deterred by neg comments.

I agree with the idea except the last part. Making his seed taste good eill ruin the realism of the novel that come here for,

Development is good. No rush. The whole appeal of this story was “naturally” developing a relationship. Chemical manipulation destroys it. Just keep doing what you’re doing and don’t doubt yourself. Good job.

There was no useless content. Everything set the mood.

A shame it was dropped

Why would you want that? If you don't got s.th good to say, say nothing.

Either say 'there was a lot more detail' or 'there were a lot more details'.