Ugh, he's really going forward with the potions shop. This is such a terrible idea that it makes me want to cry; There is no way for this to go well without the author drilling holes into the world plot. Seriously, forget everything else, would you trust a 12 year old to concoct your regular drugs? Why would magical ones be better when accredited alternatives exist?

Author - you are seriously dancing on the tip of a needle with these chapters. MC is a borderline terrorist with his actions, but the ministry keeps f-ing up just enough to keep him on the side of "revolutionary" as well. Well done.

Yes. Canonically yes. Absolutely.

Alright. Stop here. Let's talk political ramifications of this statement. This statement is effectively saying "The ministry has sent dementors to assassinate your children" to half the Wizengamot. This statement right here? Yeah, it just killed the Ministry of Magic. If not for Fudge doubling down on this, Alaric's actions would be in the range of Terrorist or Dark Lord, but this statement was the Ministry of Magic admitting responsibility for the attempted assassination of the children of several highly placed political trustees. Even Putin, with all his power, couldn't get away with openly admitting like this.

According to the synopsis, it's an original world... It seems to be based around a re:zero style magic system mixed with Irregular@MagicHigh politics... Gotta admit it feels kinda iffy with the MC just lurking in the house still though.

Y'know, considering that devils rely on contracts as a core principal of their continued existence, he's really explaining this the wrong way. Whether written or verbal, Kuroka entered a contract with her master when she accepted her evil piece, and her "master" was in the process of violating her side of said contract. If the devil higher up's DON'T do anything about that and the information gets out? Oohooo, the devils are doomed - completely doomed, not just a misfortune. Just ask Cleria Belial how devils treat any evidence of contract violations to avoid such issues.

I'll note, while Ants do have higher potential strength, they lack the regeneration of spiders that allows Peter to get stronger faster than an ant ever could. A human sized ant would lack the ability to climb walls without damaging them due to how they actually climb (Essentially clawing into the surface of the material). No enhanced equilibrium or precog, minimal enhancements to reflexes and agility, no enhancement to intelligence or learning. Ants are boring.

-_- Really? Ants? You're crossing worlds and going with Ants? Sphinx, Nundu, Dragon, Thunderbird, Basilisk, Acromantula, Manticore. It'd be nice if the MC at least considered some of these instead of keeping a narrowminded approach. Bleh, ants are boring.

Enough tension to snap the string. The early story never lets go of the tension for a moment. Honestly, I wasn't going to review until the author introduced other enhanced individuals - Everyone else is the ultimate version while MC's just an idiot with the powers of an energy starved nerfed version of a nerfed version on the deathbed with cancer. Even with an interdimensional storage at his behest, he gives away his weapons at first opportunity, every single time. The MC doesn't do anything except rush in head first. He doesn't think of any alternatives besides "HEY, Dante could do this!" and just blindly ignores other options. It doesn't help that the X-Men also seem to believe they can legally incarcerate someone.

I get wanting to change it, but wouldn't it have been better to make a new story and add a chapter saying "This is being rewritten under <title>"? Even if you wanted to keep the title, you could have renamed this one to match. *shrug* Honestly, this story was above par for Webnovel, so I'm kinda sad to see what was here go.

Some general advice; When writing fanfics, if you're going to use canon events - particularly when using idiotic canon events that the original writers f'd up on - you can generally skip a lot of the details. No one actually likes MC Baby chapters where the MC can't do anything, and a lot can be implied using canon as a crutch. Seriously, the tv scriptwriters for Daisy were idiots, they kinda forced a backstory in when it came up - largely because she doesn't really fit with the comic origin well enough.

Supreme Hubris: Idiots, Endangerment and Larceny Division.

I'm not suggesting to drop this, but it might help you feel out a solution if you draw out an outline with plot points - all in point form - of how you'd write the story now, then compare it against what happened.

Most of the time the MC is a bland robot, very rarely peaking out to say something cringeworthy before returning to robot-hood. The main character lies habitually; the author uses the MC's lies to drag on plotlines which could theoretically be resolved into a mess - these illogical lies are despite him being generally robotic. The actual visible Falna updates are few and far between with minimal visible progress in what is shown.

Oh ffs, The MC is a stupid Hermione. -_-

-_- The League couldn't be this self-righteous about killing when dealing with attacks on their *civilian* homes - especially not when coming home to half-dead guests in a State that has active "Stand your ground" laws.

Erm, not sure if you're aware, but the Revan you play as in KotOR is far weaker than him performing at his peak. Revan at his peak power would probably be when he ignited the Star Forge, channeling more than enough power in The Force to destroy a solar system if directed differently. He was actually insanely powerful, even if he couldn't consistently act as a conduit for that much of The Force.

This author doesn't do butterflies; he uses forced plot correction to force them to go away. There's talk about avoiding melodrama and avoiding Dumbledore bashing, but then talks about dumbles doing memory manipulation and what is effectively mind control as if it's a good thing while turning every other character in the story into doormats - and of course, confirms in an author note that he wants the MC to be a doormat too! General suggestion to the author: If you want to just explore the magical world and not worry about shit? Either eliminate MC baggage through non-deus-ex-machina, or make the MC someone else. This method of doing it flattens out the MC's personality for the rest of the story.

"Hello, Dumb-as-a-door dark lord manufactory! We make em, you suffer! What can we do to ruin the future today?"

The premise is a lot of fun, the mixture of world power systems is great, but the way MC doesn't really matter in the world. He creates at least as many problems as he solves and his solutions are... Questionable to say the very least for someone who's had to deal with racism as a Witcher. His attitude and straightforward approach to problems that should be handled with tact an caution are contrasted by his honestly idiotic and roundabout approach to problems that should be toppled head on... It's like his character is designed to cause the maximum amount of chaos for every action he takes. Beyond the issues with the MC himself, the wordpadding are a bit much. There is literally a chapter where it takes 3-5 paragraphs for irrelevant person A to hand moderately relevant person B a scabbard.