LiLBoyHatake

Biased review of course, I’m a big fan of the world I’ve made up. I think there some a lot of unique aspects about this story. I hope that I can continue to develop the world and characters! Thanks!

Worldbuilding like no other, plot twists aplenty, and one unkillable roach. Fantastic.

Praise be to The Fool!

Yea theres 0 depth to her rn

No inspection of the property? Didnt even look at the financial model of the business?

This doesnt make sense, he has had a good atitude for the last 18 chaps. Throwing this in so quickly just makes it seem like ur scrambling for some type of conflict

Please use past tense!!!!

Really cliche sl far. Already forgetting the main plot is that the MC idles and becomes op.