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ohhh ok thanks for clearing that up.

so can he eat more DFs since he's immortal?

Mmmm, I don't know man, you can't fault me for saying it's a generic fanfic and you know it is. Also, I've read many MTLs I can stand reading them despite translation quality, but the fact that the mc is called "the clan" is such a big turn off. It may seem little but names are very important and especially when it's the mc. Other character's names although translated badly I can still get through context, but the mc is an oc. Like maybe you could change the name to something else that sounds like a proper name. However, I don't enjoy reading it with his name like so.

so like are you the author or translator or something? why would my feedback matter to you? btw, I know my phrasing sound very aggressive through text so I'm sorry for that, but I genuinely curious

wait, when was this mentioned? I got to chap 9 before dropping it, I guess I missed it so mb on that.

I dont know how anyone can stand to read this MTL. First of all, the mc of the novel is called "the clan" like that no uppercase no nothing so you get confused reading it. That alone should stop at least 95% of readers, including the few who can stand reading MTLs daily like me. Plus, the story ain't even that good, it's just a generic Chinese DD fanfic where the mc likes to shit on Tang San. The system allows him to steal things and abilities/powers from any universe I think. Additionally, the system has this "hate" points system thingy that even the translator left a TN saying that it doesn't add much to the plot. Also, when the mc steals something from someone, they somehow know that it's the mc who stole it with no explanation. TL;DR just don't read it, even if you're desperate.

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can you give me your discord? (username and code)

Writing Quality: 1 Stability: 5 Story development: 2 Character design: 3 World Background: 3 So, my computer got fucked and the review I was writing got deleted and I can't be bothered to write it all again so I'll summarize it. Writing quality is just bad. Poor vocabulary from the autho, which I'm assuming will be excused by something along the lines of "english isn't my first language" so whatever I guess. The dialogue in the story is the biggest turn-off ever. It's like reading a conversation in a roleplaying discord server or something. Momo: *blushes* Lucifer: *goes in for a handshake* The story development is also disappointing. The MHA arc can basically be summarized as: MC gets OP, shows off, gets girl, leaves world. Another complaint I have is why tf does the MC make a JARVIS for himself. He can literally will any skill/ability into existence, but instead makes JARVIS make the power. Why? "Hey JARVIS, make X skill for me." ????????? what's the point. Why does he need a middle man to make the skills for him. Omnificence doesn't even require the user to have to understand the intricacies of the skill he's making Anyway, next he goes to the Solo Leveling world. Now take what I'm about to say with a grain of salt because we're only one chapter in the arc atm. Why doesn't he take Momo out with him? why leave her in his pocket dimension? why does he not give her any powers and instead gives one to Izuku? Why does he simp more for Izuku than his actual girlfriend? talking about Momo, MC never went to visit her parents and he just takes her to another world. Momo herself, seems to not have any attachment to her family and just leaves with MC without a second thought. However, as I mentioned before, we're only a chapter in so maybe my questions will be answered, but honestly, at this point, it could probably go towards the pokemon waifu route.

Good chapter, I'm really liking the cooking scenes so keep doing those. Maybe in the future, he can have a rivalry with Sanji. Btw, where are we in the OP timeline?

bruh this is actually paedophilia

So, this is just practice then... so will you even finish this fic? cause I'm having Monkey in the Multiverse flashbacks.

Honestly, I think that you can just release one per day, since that's already very good for webnovel standards. Plus, of you do this you can stock up chapters which you can post on days you don't write anything. That being said, if you're confident enough to write enough chapters to mass release every friday we'll certainly welcome it happily. Also, if you're confident in your story you could even set up a Patreon, though you'd need to observe if people like your story enough to pay for it, so long term.

well now that you've explained yourself a bit, thanks btw, I think you should stick with this

A beta reader refers to a proof reader, a person who reads the story before it's published to check for any errors.

Finally! I've seen so many Pokemon fics with mc training aura, but never see them fight.

Btw, author, I just remembered this is an AU, but how AU are we talking? like is the only thing present from the canon the power system of Nen? will we see the original characters or no?

Pretty badass ngl

What stats does a Kage have?