Apple0726

Please, man... come back...

Nice!

Hiruzen is so easy to accept him as a Konoha's ninja... please, rewrite this chapter to give more sense... obviuosly, this is a humble advise.

Please, don't stop!

Cheer up man! I want to read and follow your story.

I like this ff so far. The MC is 'completely' original, but the other character's personalities are very similar to the original story, except for Yang Xin; she is the unique problem of the story. I don't like her. However, the remainder is great.

I'm trying to improve my grammar before coming back, probably a Naruto Fanfic.

good job!

The idea is good, but the dialogues need a little more fluidity...

I like the story so far...