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TatuGDM1yrCommentedThis is worth way more than that. It should be worth hundreds of millions or a few billions. It is way better than that 1 billion canon. Also, after the attack, he should have asked extra money for anything that Pierce was not aware about the price.
"The price is fair, only ten million."- TatuGDM1yrReplied to Kurogano
In this case, as a suggestion, I would recommend to make the girls busy helping the children or something like that... their scape didn't feel natural with all the people available that could kill then with one hit. Looking at the girls development/character the girls would have stopped then if not because of the plot.
This was the first time in a long while since an enemy had escaped him and he was very upset about it "Damn... I should have extended the ward wider.. I just didn't expect an idiot to get in my way so suddenly". - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Ok... why the girls let then run away? They are intelligent and I don't see any reason why they would not help. They can read the situation.
This was the first time in a long while since an enemy had escaped him and he was very upset about it "Damn... I should have extended the ward wider.. I just didn't expect an idiot to get in my way so suddenly". - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Really... agree do not disclose future information??? seems like only valid for the traitor... this is getting ridiculous!!!
James who was all too eager with Sirius always, nodded immediately in agreement. The Slytherin prefects would be already patrolling after few minutes after finishing the meeting. It would be the perfect opportunity to prank them. Besides they were all Death Eaters in making, Professor Dumbledore had taken the names of various Death Eaters Harry already knew and James recongnized many of them. - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Yeah... and they have disclosure information regarding Snap... why not Peter???
His father, his godfather, Remus and the traitor Peter. It was so hard for him to simply not go and blame the man for all the deaths he caused but he couldn't. Professor Dumbledore had asked them to not disclose information as the timeline was no longer correct, the vow was also doing the same and preventing them in disclosing the information. - TatuGDM1yrReplied to chefs4
Thank you!
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The problem is that there is nothing being used for dialogue although you are using this new marks for thoughts. As a reader, it is confusing and hard to identify dialogue. I also never read a book or novel with your marks instead of quotes, so I am not sure why quotes would cause confusion for the readers. But that is ok, I don't mind and you can us any system you like. What I mind is a lack of marks for dialogues. It really makes the reading hard.
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Please help to use " for dialogue and ' for thoughts.
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Probably because the author needs the threat alive for his plot. I honestly don't agree with this approach, the author should not have added A if this is the end result. Also they could return to the village while she killed him. Unless the author justify this in the next chapter, that makes no sense.
Mito took one last look at A and spoke while the red chakra receded off her body "It seems you're lucky today brat, but next time you harm my Granddaughter, I'll kill you myself." - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Why not use Loki as human shield? Imagine Thors face when he sees the hammer hitting his brother.
Thor, not wasting any more time on conversation, abruptly pulls his hand back and throws his hammer toward Brock, who quickly drops the injured Loki on the ground and crosses his arms in front of him in defense. - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Don't forget that he is also younger. Not sure if that he was that powerful this time.
'I doubt any of my Water Release would work against him and Earth Release is weak against Lightning Release. And I haven't started learning Wind Release since it is the only affinity that I don't naturally have. Even then, this guy took multiple powerful Wind Release jutsus as if they were nothing. That means my only other option currently is Fuinjutsu, but it'll take a while for me to be able to use it.' - TatuGDM1yrPosted
The idea behind this story is quite original and it had a good start. However the focus of this story is not the MC like the original. It is all about Lily. Most of the chapters are dedicated to feelings towards Lily from MC and other characters and Lily's own feelings. The original story had a better MC and story development as Lily's worship ended in the first few chapters and would be back only from time to time. Now it is all the time and become repetitive.
- TatuGDM1yrReplied to TatuGDM
forget it. missed the last line
I am skipping some years, as I don't think my audience will be very curious about my baby days when all I did was eat, sleep and repeat. And mind you, girls don't poop. - TatuGDM1yrCommented
you forgot about the
I am skipping some years, as I don't think my audience will be very curious about my baby days when all I did was eat, sleep and repeat. And mind you, girls don't poop. - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Same clothes, same room, same tooth paste, same everything but the phone logo....
Brushing my teeth, combing my hair, and going to the bathroom I head back to my room to grab my personal items. When I get to grabbing my phone I notice that my phone is a bit different. I take a closer look just to see or not see the same old Samsung logo on the back of the phone, but a STARK logo. I stare at that for a good couple of seconds before chuckling a bit inside. Saying out loud "When I get to work I so will get you guys back for this" before pocketing the "joke" phone, and heading for the front door of the apartment. - TatuGDM1yrCommented
Even if I was late I would be concerned with a blue thing in my vision and look for a doctor. Better loose your job than becoming blind for lack of medical care.
Waking up to my alarm going off, and shutting it off, I start getting out of bed so I could get ready for work. When I realize that I see a light blinking at the left top edge of my vision. Wondering what it was I look over to the blinking light to see nothing at all, but that light was still blinking in the same spot in my vision. Choosing to ignore it, because I only had a couple of minutes to get ready for work, I get out of bed and start putting my cloths on. I walk over to the mirror in the bathroom, and notice that I still look the same, guess I still have hope that one day I could live in one of those novels. Red hair, Hazel eyes, 5'10", Normal shaped body with a bit bigger belly, a face with what my father calls "The Resting Bitch Face", and a hair cut that my barber calls "Missionary Cut" which I can not help but laugh at every single time. - TatuGDM1yrReplied to Frizepize
And you should try to grow up. Looking at you comment, you could not be an adult, maybe a teen trying to show off.
Instead, I just struggled back up to my feet and took a small pocket knife from my pocket.