thesupremeowl

I realize that Lyanna is supposed to be his one, but it always seems like Rhaella is a really close second, so why does he not marry her in secret. This way, he will have 5 years for every child with her and Lyanna. It feels like the author is constantly edging things with Rhaella and tbh, she is perfect for a 2nd wife, because of how motherly and warm she acts towards all the other women!

If you are planning to let Robert live and be good friends with the MC, I think that introducing some kind of rough sports game would be very good. A lot of famous modern team sports have a long history that goes back 100s of years, so you can take your pick. Lacrosse is a good one and it is pretty rough, somewhat on the level of rugby. You can also make the MC invent the olympic games or something(I know that jousting and stuff like that is still considered similar).

Not really sure about that, but there are 'ground apples' which might be potatoes or yacon. I don't remember potatoes directly being mentioned, but it has been a long time...

I'm kinda starting to get an idea what might happen or atleast what this situation reminds me of. <spoiler>In the Invincible comics, which I think hasn't happened yet in the show, a similar thing happens with one of the heroes. The hero name is Robot and he was in an alternative dimension for a time in which he was a king. After returning to Earth, he started to see that the way things were being does not bring good results, so he decides that he will fix everything with his advanced technology, creating a more peaceful world for normal humans. Invincible sees that it works and even leaves Earth, because even though he cannot agree to it(because it looks like slavery), he sees the outcome</spoiler>

it should be 'His' not 'Your' I've seen this used incorrectly many more times and it is weird. The author should use 'Your' only when the subject is directly addressing him, not when he is in proximity or whatever the author's reasoning is. Also, when one person is directly addressing, the others would follow by saying 'His Grace'.

I can't imagine Varys groveling and pleading like this. The character seems to have accepted many things in the world and how they allign. I believe that he would've already been aware of this outcome and that would have made him more understanding in this situation. Everyone fears death, but in this scenario, someone like Varys would take it with dignity.

The author could've atleast used the measurement units of Westeros... I know this is a chinese fan fic, but atleast make it more authentic. Comparing Westeros and everything of that world to China is okay, because your MC is a Chinese person reincarnated into that world, but changing things like measurment units takes us out of the story. Although, I would say there are other things that also made me cringe.

This is so redundant. This kind of *incoming* danger makes things feel incredibly artificial. It doesn't really spark any emotion from me as a reader outside of annoyance.

I feel like the author doesn't really understand a lot of things about the story and its characters. Before this, there were many other things that bothered me and it was mostly character adaptation. For example, both Mormonts seem very different. Jorah seems a lot more idiotic than the book, while his father less like a leader l and not as stoic.