shadowsnake_13

now you're making it sound like he's not even a child when you have him playing as a child from the beginning because a child does not agree to this if they can't be with their parents they normally say scream and cry bloody murder because they will not leave and their parents

and apparently the Jedi in your story do not listen to a very powerful being that tells them that they're social or society will come down in the blaze of glory in his hands if should they teach him or interfere with him but hey that's okay you just made them look like idiots I don't know maybe listen to the being that can manipulate their their own memories of them to interfere with the future but okay you make everyone sound like idiot but if that's what you want to go for go on

have you never heard of stranger danger why is this kid listening to a complete strangers over his own parents and his parents did explain it to him for a kid that should have been that simple they don't have complicated thoughts like that I remember being a kid and I don't remember having those kind of complicated thoughts your parents told you you had abilities like a superhero you believe them

the first to 10 is when when they get to 10 is when they get their first Spirit ring every 10 not every 20 because you got their first Spirit ring on their 20th level what happened to 10 if you listen to it what redo the novels and manga you'll realize you messed up on the ring

if you're going to do a Spider-Man fanfic you better do it as Spider-Man not as someone you want you but it might as well make your own character your own superpowers and not be Spider-Man cuz you're not Spider-Man if you're not Spider-Man

I have a question every fan once in awhile a fanfic is written when they're given the option to change race they decide to stay human why you lived as a human already it's not that great when there's other chances other experiences you could actually go through there are other traits that other races have in the fantasy world wouldn't you want to write about that oh I want to be human what what does human have arrogance destructive abilities always wanting to destroy too far to control and to dominate over others that's about it every other creature in the fantasy world has other things going for them but okay it's your story go for it but I'm stopping here

this here is why people drop your story your novel in the world of soul land The Spirit Hall was an evil organization who wanted to dominate the world led by a man who wanted to be a god and believe everyone should bow down to him as such and you sent the main character to join them that's why

that's not a sword that's a lance it says things that people use when they gels

I can ignore the fact that some of this s*** that they're so called humans are doing treating an alien like a human being I can ignore that but the moment you send an alien that looks like a f****** alien to go make a group of people on it and human world is f****** stupid I'm dropping this s*** because of that no human go okay alien from another world I'm going to work with you

Strong ? that is little don't kid yourself