TDG nice

Just don't stop writing

Chapter 1 A good start is waiting for you

Anyway.. you are doing a good job and don't care about the negative comments

good writing.. but I find that you have a little change in the personalities of this one, which I did not like. I hope he focuses on upgrading his strength rather than developing relationships.

I don't really understand how you say he's arrogant and cowardly???? Where is he arrogant where is he coward??? ...and about it being weak...my friend, the starting point is always from zero, otherwise I wouldn't bother writing...and also 5 wishes that whoever decides what they will be....Finally, you say that nothing has been achieved!!! I think we are only at the beginning of the story. Why are you in such a hurry? Otherwise, you would have made him wish from the start for super strength without training..... Really disappointing your comment if you don't like saying where is the problem just so I can fix it after all I'm a newbie or don't waste your precious time with it reading it .... Thanks

After seeing that some wanted me to finish the story, I will come back in a week and see if it was worth it. And I'm sorry again, I'm a newbie in the world of writing

Strength of the Hell-Crushing Godmammoth cultivation technique from the Sage Monarch novel. to clarify

Translation problems, sorry 😅

It is a gift from the Great Entity in Chapter 1 and is located on the first floor of the Ascendant Emperor's Tower

It is a gift from the Great Entity in Chapter 1 and is located on the first floor of the Ascendant Emperor's Tower

Sure, but after the plan to collapse Konoha and the death of the third generation

The reason for making them see this is to show that choosing Konoha at the expense of their son was a mistake. As for I saw him seriously taking a shower, man, you are here hunting for holes in the novel, and if they see him naked, he is their biological son, there is nothing wrong with that. Also, not everyone has the same perverted ideas as you

Sorry I do what I can. And if you know anything that improves quality, don't skimp on me

I'm not focusing on Nijitsu, they know that Naruto in that period is a failure...otherwise why did he fail the graduation exam in the anime?.A ninja isn't stupid enough to be the last of the class who has mastered the transformation technique overnight. . Thanks for the comment because I will work on improving the quality

The hero in my novel does not care about what others see in front of him being a ninja or not not in his interest, immortality is more important than that. As for concealing it, it will not last long. Showing a mighty force at first seems to me a stupid and meaningless way to the least worthy opponent, for example, pain.

First of all, this is my first novel, so I'm literally a beginner. Second, I took the time scale from the anime and manga, so the place and time should be clear. The third translation has problems. Explain because English is not my native language... Thank you for mentioning the shortcomings, I will work to improve them

The novel is not a harem. I'm not good at writing harem and I'm afraid to spoil the story