i feel like theres a difference between some random singer idol, and one of the, if not the, most skilled close combat specialists of their generation.
you obviously never have come across anyone who plays Paradox interactive games. genocide is an average tuesday there. also these comments are wild
haha yeah the mother is just a leech, she never really treats him like a son and has only ever stolen or manipulated him even 4,300 chapters deep
(4322 chapters in) the system does come back after a huge overhaul which makes it no longer about the mechs, which honestly i dont mind but it disappears again quickly and isnt seen for a while, again.
The overall background is decent. but the MC is an absolute buffoon, he leave people alive that end up coming back to try to kill him again multiple times, he acts suprised when people turn on him even though he literally read about people doing so in his grandfathers journal. he has ’amazing memory’ but could barely pass his college exams. not to mention that the story is horridly cliche. young master overestimated himself and gets killed by mc, causing a blood feud with the family? check. high level people abusing their power constantly even though its against the law? check. mcs wife gets stolen at the wedding by ulra powerful people from a higher realm? check. do yourself a favor and skip
i have to read this book in increments specifically because gloriana is the worst character in existence. their relationship was so contrived and forced and i hated every second of it and the book has only become more and more tedious with her existence
because we dont need one… our food, housing and utilities are all provided for.. everything we earn is expendible income
i caught up to the most recent chapters a month or two ago and stopped to let them build up, while it does indeed start getting better again, its still pushing filled with the same issues that i said in my reviews, gloriana is a plague on the novel. and his progress is practically stagnant compared to the first 500 chapters, all because he doesnt wanna rely on the one thing that made him worth anything, the system.
how? its 21 U and 65 cents. aka 21.65 U
(3542 Chapters in) TLDR: Do yourself a favor, read till the War arc, then quit. it only gets worse After 3500 chapter of reading this novel, the only thing i can express is disappointment and frustration. The first few hundred chapters are rough, but they had promise and the premise of “the system” made sense. The MC progressed at a reasonable pace, that is until the infamous “War” arc. this is where the entire story begins to go downhill. See, The Mech touch ‘was’ as system novel up until the war arc. At the beginning of this arc he is forced to put away his system and you dont see it for nearly a hundred chapters. I believe this is where the author got the idea to start phasing out the system, because even after the war arc he begins to use the system less and less, supposedly to not ‘become over reliant’. yknow, reliant on the one thing that is the entire reason that he isnt rotting in obscurity in the first place. The second he stops relying on the system, his progress grinds to a halt, in the 2000+ chapters since, he has had minute and intangeble progress with no signs of true progression. Now all that is pretry damning for what was supposed to be a system novel, reimagining your system novel into something that is decidedly not is a bold move, one which i think didnt turn out well. however, this wasn’t even the worst mistake that the author made. no, the single worst mistake that the author made can be summed up by one name, gloriana. Up until the moment ves met this girl, he was a calculating man who, while not being abrasively masculine or overbearing, still stood up for himself. Once gloriana was introduced he was dragged along like a dead fish, by the most unlikable female lead ive ever read about. This female supremacist, ultra religious, man hating, obsessive-compulsive woman is the single most annoying character in existence. her constant harrassment and dismissal of the MC is absolutely ludicrous and it is further compounded by the fact that the MC just lets her walk all over him on countless occassions. The authors choice to include a female lead who no one could ever possibly like is confounding, and is the single biggest reason that ive quit reading this novel DOZENS of times, to the point that the only reason i come back to this book is because im alread 3500 chapters in
you tend to throw away those kinda keys… or burn them.. in the case of a super flammable paper talisman
well yeah it does come across like that at this point, it has been 63 chapters and so far he has fought a single time, everything else revolved around training and talking to others, heck theres plenty of self proclaimed slice-of-lifes that have quite a bit more conflict
i am not smart
also you have a few too many commas in certain places, and not enough in others. try to say what youre typing out loud, if you notice a pause in how you speak, thats likely where a comma should go. ex. ‘Still (pause, comma) after hearing this we converted the park near the temple into a training area for you chosen.’ if you read it out loud you’ll see certain unnecessary commas in the sentance that fragment the flow.
From what I have seen so far* or I‘ve seen, saw is past tense and your sentance is present tense. you’re not supposed to mix the two in one sentance. I dont usually correct, but you seem to make an effort to correct any mistaken grammar, which is rare on here.
honestly i assume the system means that theyd have a 66% chance to survive if they were unarmed. Even a pistol is such a force multiplier that fighting a zombie solo should be 100% if it were included in the calculations
This story is a good premise with a bad execution. It is in bad need of a proper editor, to flesh out the multitude of run on sentences and redundant repetition. The grammatical errors are rampant throughout the story, making it very difficult to concentrate on the story itself. the “descriptive” facet of the story is just the author calling something “so/very” fast or “so/very” beautiful or “so/very” powerful. This way of describing something is frowned upon because it feels amateurish and is a detriment the the quality of a story. The structure of the chapters are just small ”paragraphs”, which are realistically just one long runon sentence, and this continues throughout the entire story. The characters within the story are basically irrelevant. They fade into the background, never to be seen again. The main character acts in ways that are very much contrary to their supposed past life, in which they were a supreme cultivator. All in all this story is a premise that i dearly wish to see succeed, and perhaps with some editing and revision it can truly be the story works so hard to make.