fallenknight90

hmm this story is honestly good with the main character addiction of gambling and I honestly hope you the author makes the mc suffer since it looks like he needs it since he was basically a broken man that needed to understand that he needs to break himself to remove the addiction from gambling and I understand that he needs his summons forcing him to confront the idea that if he keeps chasing the high of getting any tickets would kill him or worse makes him do something he would regret and believe me if you the author wants to give us the readers something to get our hearts pumping make him confront his past and why he needs to be like that and lastly I do hope you make the story longer and here's a idea update once a week to get your story to be stronger and gives time to write what you really want

I gotta say you made this book pretty good for a first timer and it's actually a breath of fresh air in the new story about highschool of the Dead and you the author has something going with the gacha style system for the main character and how your not making him overpower with all those abilities and congrats on making a enemy that slowly gets stronger slowly but remember that you need to increase your writing in the chapter to get a better grasp of the story and I do hope you may allow some of the side characters like rei may get a chance to get a taste of the power to make a carrot on the stick with the change of getting a power which makes the off chance of getting betray by some background characters it'll be a good idea for your story and I do hope you restart to make more chapters with more words and lastly i do hope you don't give up on this story like the rest of the author that either got overwhelmed with making chapters or unable to think of ideas for the story remember that you to pace yourself and if you're struggling with ideas ask the readers for any good ideas you may take to make it your own

this type of stuff looks good on paper but you need to understand that having a debt no matter how much you owe it'll be paid one way or another since I know what you're trying to write but you gotta start small like an unnamed genie ninjas and slowly grow your points and make sure to not let others know what you're done cause sooner or later somebody will figure out what your doing and I'll be not pretty and sure you can do whatever you want to female civilians but you have to be smart enough to know that being a debt collector would means you going to need protection either someone underemployment or working off debt and you can slowly make a stripper club for pretty girls who owns your mc money they can't pay and sure you can ignore my advice and go on doing your own thing but remember that if you're making a story you gotta make it interesting and understandable for your own sake and you can always earn money by getting money by patron and look through different ideas depending on how much they like the story.

man this story is pretty good for a newbie on this app and I gotta say if the writer kept making chapters like these then they would have more people praising how good it is and I do hope they can keep writing these since it's so hard to read fushion type of stories since a lot of them always goes overboard and make it to complicated with its's early overpowered fusion that's to easy for the main character to do without sounding like their to overpowered in the beginning and this story is something else since the main character doesn't automatically have a loyal soldier since in the 4 character he helped a dying soldier and it doesn't seem forced by having the main character have to earn his loyalty and It'll best worth it in the long run and the main character ability needs either needs souls or kills it'll doesn't matter if he really work for it and lastly they need to pace themselves and make the chapters longer cause to give the readers reason to wait for the next chapter when the writer needs time to write chapters

gotta say reading something like this is definitely different from what I'm used to and it's pretty good for a new writer and adding Arthur Morgan in the last of us is something that I didn't I would read but Arthur is someone who I respect deeply beside kiryu and I do hope you continue with making more chapters and make sure to keep a good pace in writing these chapters cause I seen other writers do too much in little time and It'll Lead your book notifications making sense and lastly think about how the characters would interact with each other and make sure to give the readers to actual enjoy the stroy

this story is amazing since it's something very different from what I'm used to and it's something that I read almost every day when I'm feeling down and hope you keep on making great chapters and hopefully when you make another story since you got better at writing when you first made this story and I do hope you make your new story more "steaming " since you're gotten better writing those

this story is amazing but I missed your older stories better because I feel that it's added a different style of reading then I'm used to and I do hope you May return to them even though you may think they're not worth writing it but I think you might need to go back and see if your truly wanted it gone I'll understand that you might want to concentrate on this story and Hope when you do make a new story I hope you take inspiration from them since you gotten better when you were just starting out.

this concept of the story is quite interesting for being a Willy Wonka storyline in the DC universe and I hope it will update soon since the story is quite interesting to learn about a third party in the world of DC giving out a special kind of candy to offer various kinds of abilities and I also hope you make the story feel like a mysterious background character that controls the villains and hero side.

hello author I am currently writing this to you in regards to your story and I gotta say it's very good and I'm amazed at how you write the story and the level of details.I applaud you for your hard work and if you keep writing your dxd story until the end and hopefully your next story will be as good as your previous story.......p.s make them more smutty and take your time with it

in my opinion the main character develops his strength and dungeon to a proper degree dance set out in his journey to get stronger while Sophie evolves or ranks up until a hobgoblin or something else so to make herself more useful and more impact later on. and lastly add an harem in the MC dungeon and not the generic types that mc helps or save the girls. i want the mc character to enslaved and capture all kinds of female of any tuypes