Garland

Well, i'm glad that it has been updated again but i feel like i really wish we could go back to Orario. I expected the journey to end after the whole Beltane thing. I think one overall thing that has been lacking with the story is that Silver, despite being the Captain of the Hestia Familia, he hasn't been taking that position very serious. I wish we could actually see him being a Captain for once instead of doing the usual whole solo journey. It's been a little boring and kinda sad seeing all the characters joining the familia yet still the overall interaction hasn't really been much. Kinda defeats the whole being part of a Familia purpose.

The story overall is just average. Everything about it from the characters, his abilities, character interaction and even writing is just so bland and average. Everything feels so nonchalant. His interaction with the characters and the overall story feels boring and cliche. Like, i mean, meeting Corrin in that way just made my eyes roll. Even the other personalities of the other characters feels bland. Like, the dude has the Blades of Chaos and yet Zhu Yuan or anyone at all isn't surprised seeing two weapons that don't look mechanical at all possessing such abilities. The MC is a bland and overall boring character with nothing to his personality at all. Yes he shows some personality but those are just so basic with nothing that intersting to him. No struggle, no actions that show his overall characters and just nothing that makes him interesting to read. The Abilty System is overall broken and unbalanced with what it does and that with how it is integrated, it won't take long before the MC becomes OP. The Cost and Reward is just so unbalanced that it feels like even the Cost of it doesn't really contribute anything. Its just their to make it somewhat believable but overall its nothing that important. I mean, it would have been fine if their was a struggle in using Dennies to pay for the Rolls but you just threw it all out by giving him 1,000,000 Dennies at the start. Like at this point, he is just getting anything without much consequence. Would have been better of him starting and actuall earning Dennies to either do some gacha rolls or pay for like an apartment or food but whatever.

It's below average. While yes i like how he isn't being a part of the usual Phaeton and actually starting differently, the MC is just an overall boring character. This is always the main issue with stories that have their OC embody someone else and because of how you write the power system, it overall just made his character more boring. If he doesn't even has his own personality, then why not just have the ACTUAL Zhongli be the main character. The MC tries to be him, acts like him, looks like him so why not it just be Zhongli. Zhongli overall would have been better off being the mc than this OC who is just plain boring to read as he has Zhongli's financial issues. Overall as much as the writing quality helps, the MC and the story is just overall bland.

Its been interesting, the whole political aspects of things and watching the MC navigate while also using his knowledge for aid. I guess the only thing that i had problems with is just it has been like that a lot. I kinda wanted to see the MC interact more with established characters and see some fights.

(Reposted Review. Don't know why mine was deleted) Despite the spelling and grammar problems, my main issue comes from just how rush, unorganised and just overall messy the story and writing. I can see a good story but man, sometimes things aren't explained, everything is just rushed and overall it feels like completely random at times. Their is no clear direction to the story and it feels like sometimes most of what i am reading is a summary.

You're still gonna be the terrible writer regardless of how much you try and change your name to hide your really shitty past writing account. Pretty much no one ends their name with Z anymore in this website due to knowing how much it has become connected to the shittiest writer in Webnovel.

I thought you finally kicked the bucket after you got your account reported and deleted. Guess cockroaches are really hard to kill. And as always, just a terrible writer with no skills, no knowledge and just nothing but trash that's not even worth to be called smut. Trash will always be trash regardless of how much you try to polish it.

Then what is the overall point of it being a crossover then or even a fanfic? Do you write a fanfic and all you do is just follow the plot? Do you even know what the point of a fanfic is? If you put a character in a story and their existence does nothing at all to change anything, then there overall existence wouldn't have even mattered and there is no point in even adding them. It just boggles my mind that that is your response to my review.

Hah, still the same childish attitude as always. Get a negative review and you go throw insults. Now you are calling me gay? Why? Got tired of always insulting my mom and how you fuck her? Blah blah blah, your work and patreon paywalled antics just goes to show who you really are

Well well well, if it isn't Z...looks like you are back and posting stories again. From Summary alone, I already see how its the same writing style again. Just like the Synopsis, its messy as the chapters which are just full of complete paragraphs with no structure or pacing. Its a little improvement compared to the complete nonsense and terrible form of writing you did in the past but that even leaves much to be desired. Yeah sure there is no Paywall but really how can we expect as maybe future stories, you will put paywall again. You already formed a reputation even in this Webnovel for Paywalling Fanfic stories that aren't even that good.