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Needs work. The way it’s written makes it seem as if the family was safe from the fire and fled the city but at the end it says he is looking for his family’s killers. Who lived and who died? It’s also confusing when the sister went missing.
It’s too soon to pick since most of these characters haven’t been introduced into the story yet. Right now jean is in the lead just based on the cosmic connection, although I wouldn’t mind Natasha winning since he might be able to heal her physically and mentally plus they both use martial arts.
Ryuu is overrated in my opinion. Tiona would be better plus they both like combat.
Tsubaki 100%
Haxorus
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I really enjoy reading this story. I love how the eternals interact with each other and how you incorporate history into it. It must’ve taken a lot of time to research the time period but it pays off and makes the story interesting. I would say you should either time skip close to modern day to make it easier for you or add opponents on a similar level to the Mc cause there isn’t much of a challenge.
Keep it the same. I like the story as is and there isn’t a need to change how he got his powers.
It’s weird how you start off in 1st person POV and then immediately go into 3rd person pov. It’s ok to change POV as long as it’s a different paragraph. So In this case the first sentence should change to 3rd person. Ex Alexander Mathews was reincarnated by accident into this brand new world.