Dimas_Pratama

Honestly, I’m so over the usual MC-getting-powers or reincarnation tropes. But turning into the Monkey King? Now that is a total curveball—definitely wasn't expecting that![img=recommend]

Honestly, I love your writing style. Man, as Luna, that sucks since she's reincarnated. To be honest, i want to see what kind of development character for her, even though world background still slowly burn (I mean, the world mapping slowly show for our reader).

I smiled through every single chapter—it's just so much fun to read! Honestly, the character descriptions just need a bit more depth. I'm fully convinced this would be perfect if the main characters and important figures had more detailed descriptions XD

So do I XD

Seriously, what's Denner's deal? Doing stupid, unnecessary things and dying on repeat. Meanwhile, I'm over here rooting for Bex to trust Cael (even if Cael is usually aloof). That said, I'm hooked on the storytelling structure and overall plot. Bex and Denner are both super guarded around Cael. The thought of Bex dying over and over gives me chills.[img=proud]

This is the first time I've gotten goosebumps just from reading Chapter 1. Is it just me? Sometimes I question whether Cael's attitude is morally gray or just a hindrance to other characters. Definitely worth the wait to see how it plays out

This story is amazing! It follows a character struggling with memory loss who is forced to join a game in the hope of finding pieces of their past, even if they have to act as a performer along the way. The story brilliantly presents the complexity of a character named Sol. Sol is so unique and intricate that it immediately drew me in, and I'm deeply invested in seeing how far they can grow and develop.[img=recommend]

Thanks for critique. Actually i want to use consistent such as hiro and allen as he. while Yumi and Rina as She. Anyway thanks again for correction

This story is good. I read twice and already keep into my library. I hope that you continue to use simple grammar, because some of them didn't understand if you read first. But that's okay since you'll always improve no matter you got struggling in your writing. I hope you didn't give up early and focus on your own writing.

Up until now, I totally enjoy this series. Especially MC from weak to strong theme. The writing quality is simple yet so easy to understand. And worldbuilding take it slow. So the reader understand a bit about the story. Too bad i want to see a character who feels sympathy to MC. Good job :D