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Lately I've been reading a lot of fanfic novels where the MC easily gets the heroine COTE, and strangely all the heroines want to follow him like pets including Horikita.. honestly it makes me bored.. And now I found a good fanfic novel where I can see the struggle of an MC who trying to win the heart of the girl he loves... Honestly, this is much more interesting
Did you know... even a low level curse will immediately regenerate unless you kill it with curse energy... therefore, toji won't be able to kill the curse without the help of a cursed tool... even though toji can hit the curse with his bare hands until it breaks... but because he doesn't have curse energy, the curse will regenerate again... Then does Minato use jutsu with chakra or curse energy... because if he uses chakra... does that mean chakra has an effect on the curse?
This chapter should have been good when Moro raised his arm and said the benefits of having a medical team.. If he just raised his arm without giving a reason.. If I was there I would probably think that Moro was just a guy who was looking for Tsunade's attention.
3 year old child has acne..?? Are you sure.. acne does appear when the face experiences a buildup of dirt and oil, but acne is also influenced by hormones.. A 3 year old child should not have acne.. if it is a dull face it is possible. But the average toddler is 3 years old even though his face is dull. Their skin remains soft because dead skin cells in toddlers exfoliate very quickly and will easily come off when they bathe.
Tanjuro sebenarnya masih sangat muda kalau tidak salah umurnya masih 25 tahun, karena kutukan pembunuh iblis tanjuro harus mati muda.. untuk kie sendiri seharusnya umurnya tidak jauh berbeda.. kemungkinan kie hamil tanjiro pada usia 16 tahun.. In Japan in the past, getting married at the age of 15 or 16 was a normal thing.. Honestly, this story has potential.. By the way, Tanjuro is a great man.. How could he not be, even though he was a little sick, he was able to make Kie give birth to 6 children
So far I like it, honestly, in my opinion, even though you haven't shown greatness in creating suspenseful plots, you are very good at creating dialogue between characters... Everything feels deep, it's very rare to see a fanfic story with good dialogue like this, most fanfics just will play with story plots where they have very little good dialogue, in fact they tend to be bad... but your fanfic is very good... Tsunade's feelings are also very clear, Tsunade is not like a teenager who will blush easily at the MC, unlike most fanfics. .. Honestly, I really like this novel because I've been looking for a fanfic with the character Tsunade as the only love interest for a long time and finally I found it..
So far I like it, honestly, in my opinion, even though you haven't shown greatness in creating suspenseful plots, you are very good at creating dialogue between characters... Everything feels deep, it's very rare to see a fanfic story with good dialogue like this, most fanfics just will play with story plots where they have very little good dialogue, in fact they tend to be bad... but your fanfic is very good... Tsunade's feelings are also very clear, Tsunade is not like a teenager who will blush easily at the MC, unlike most fanfics. .. Honestly, I really like this novel because I've been looking for a fanfic with the character Tsunade as the only love interest for a long time and finally I found it..