the story has potential, BUT the author didn't put any thought in it. system? too simplistic. story? one way line of copy/paste plot. character development? nonexistent or jumpy power level? just put a name and it's okay? place? structure wise, no good. distance, no good. in short; is the author a newbie? if not, take some vacation and improve it after some good rest. sincerely, a simple reader.

it's funny... the MC not being the MC of the story, just a good luck charm. the sect is the real MC (main crowd?). coincidences blows the roof. good as an in-between novel.

really promising novel. what's funny is that the system has an interesting origin. it doesn't come from god knows where. the ratio in effort=reward is balanced. the only minus if we can call it, is the in depth toughts of the MC.

too rushed... who is he? what's the world? rules of the world? the novel has potential.

at "system messages" you should add an additional space line (before and after the message). it's would be much smoother to read structure wise.

autor should read or reread his work. TOOOOO MANY inconsistency in his work. if he makes it correct (consistent), it would make for a really good novel. but that's my humble oppinion, not a fact.

really good. the world background especially. being able to merge two different world cultures with game elements in addition without overloading the novel with confusing systems. for me this novel basically hold the original spirit of a light/web novel. something that read when you have nothing to do while waiting for something like a station or something.

night is a genius!!!

it's a must if he doesn't want to be eaten. run little deer........RUN!!!