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MC is a pushover. its like he just wants to survive. secondly the books he started studying from have normal equations that university teaches and he doesn't know algorithms that most normal highschools students should know. All I'm saying is that the novel could have been better if the knowledge was discovered and used by MC on his own instead a girl who belittles MC at all times, has OCD, wants to use MC and has little to no respect for him is giving him books.

he is not a murder hobo, just a man in a childs body that saw his parents murdered and had the power to kill back

Cliche barrage.... It was so cringe that I got chills

Another stupid MC with young master syndrome.

Full of cringe and edginess. M.C is just 1 step away from being disliked and every plot regarding him seems forced. He has too much power but shitty execution and honestly, a lot more things that made me consider dropping this read. The cringe though. Its almost always on max.

I hope you don't nerf Haki in this because he has laws's body and could easily train himself in it. You could also just use Haki in a way to put spiritual pressure on people without going into soul reaper problems.I don't think you have really explored what people can do in one piece and what kind of special moves they have without devil fruits for combat.armament haki can be pretty devastating if used correctly even without weapon.

MC really wants to meet x men for no apparent reason. It doesn't matter if he has all the things he already has. It got annoying very quickly when the MC constantly reminds himself that he wants to meet them for no other reason just to have a fight/spar.Sadly the novel isn't that good despite gamer abilities and the dialogues seem to be a bit forced at this point.Furthermore I'm a straight guy, nothing wrong with gay people but I like peter parker straight.

Even though I know it's marvel but it feels like a completely different world.I'm not sure why but the original Author turned marvel into a cliche xianxia novel and somehow elevated china as well as completely fuck up magic and sorcery while at it and turned every marvel character into dumb side character.It even has the audience that comments on MC's every action.

Author seems to have forgotten about soul rings and how important it is to have a soul ring in soul land. MC is a depressed kid that often falls into crippling depression. (it makes me fall into depression tho) forced romance out of no where, illogical how aphrodisiac was in the kitchen and many other plot holes. I read too many times how the MC will find a way to grow strong but he spent months with a girl while planning nothing. Idk what's going on with this story but author you either need to stick 3rd pov or 1st pov, I can't read 3 paragraph with multiple povs and not feeling like burning a hole through my brain. I would recommend reading the novel thoroughly and then rewrite it. you need to know that the caravan conversation, forced romance and pregnancy and a protagonist who only thinks about being strong but does nothing other than spending time with a girl will lower your own fanfics worth. If you instead made him hard working hunter with amazing senses and a sense of responsibility it would have been completely different, he could have soul rings, have fighting experience and what not. I say all this because the idea of an archer is awesome when no one does it. you already differentiated from other but other plots ruined a lot of the story

rather good but the author had no need for hp x dc crossover. Dc has multiple sources of power has added benefit of non interference when using magic with tech around. The crossover didn't make much sense since MC is a squib. Just make a somewhat rich guy with armor or normal person with magic and armor....