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  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
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    Thank you for the chapter It would have been a lot better to hear Scorpio’s complaints and Jason’s reaction a few chapters ago. Not only is the payoff more satisfying, it makes more sense chronologically and prevents what feels like a retcon. I mean give this problem some time to exist and grow. It takes more planning but gives a better result (at least from my point of view)

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    Snowflake24 years ago
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    Thx for the chapter Side note: Unfortunately for the girl was … isn’t correct. It should be Unfortunately for the girl, she was …

  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
    Replied to Kenny_Kens

    Ah ouf 😮‍💨 I would be a shame if I had to stop this one Good to hear and all the best

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    Snowflake24 years ago
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    Thank you for the chapter As for premium I’m sorry but I wouldn’t support you. There are simply other stories I prefer, and this story, while enjoyable, isn’t distinct/unique/interesting enough for me to absolutely want the next chapter. Sorry to be a spoiler, this was without mean intent

  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
    Commented

    Yay 😁

  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
    Posted

    The protagonist just wants to live in peace, quietly becoming more and more OP, but pesky intruders keep bothering his residence. I wonder why? Maybe it’s the fact he is living as an eunuch as a retainer to a royal family member I really enjoyed this story. Probable not top tier, but I do hope it will be picked.

  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
    Commented

    How can I not when it’s so nicely asked Xd Thank you for the chapter

  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
    Commented

    Ok so I’ve noticed something and would like to share it with the author : Jason is becoming a rather bland character In this chapter (and the end of the previous one) we have an embarrassing situation yet we never know what Jason is feeling, at best we can try to deduce it from what he says. But this makes the character poorer. Emotion are an unintentional visceral reaction to a situation, they aren’t supposed to be rational or deduced. Here I would have expected something like “ Jason felt embarrassed” or even better “The questioning gazes of his camarades made him want to drill into the ground” not even making the emotion explicit. This contrasts with the first few chapters, where we could feel Jason’s despair and this also contrasts with Artemis, who is full of character and emotions, and I suspect that this is due to the fact that she can’t talk, so this was done inadvertently. On the other hand, we mostly see what Jason does or says, not what he feels. Let him almost chuckle in a serious situation because of something humorous only he noticed, or have his emotions not be reflected in his actions. Sorry if this seemed harsh, I really just wish author can improve this Thank you for the chapter

  • Snowflake2
    Snowflake24 years ago
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    Yay she’s back I’m so curious to see the relationship between her and Scorpio Thank you for the chapter