How did you manage to make the pokemon world into some type of generic cultivation novel. 'Talent' come on really.

Pace is so slow Im going to fall asleep. So much detail and background about characters that will be forgotten when he actually cultivates. Speaking of cultivation? where? he's learning all this boring stuff, stuck at this boring moral city, doing literally nothing but 'training' moral stuff. Im honestly to the point where I skip entire chapters.

Wow such a mystery a powerul mage helping a family whose powerful mage has not appeared yet. Why are you writing like a 5 year old and making literally everyone an idiot.

Why doesnt he just spend points on a big nuke of a skill instead of all these meh skills. Firebolt weak machine gun, multi firebolt weak machine gun still, fire atro turret weak machine gun... Guy has infinite mana, just get a small nuke and spam it.

What poor writing, its like readin a wikipedia page. Every generic villian character comes with their own paragraph, if only I didn't forget them instantly... I'll give it a few more chapters and drop it I guess.

Nothing has happened yet he keeps getting stronger for literally no reason. Its so boring, why even have the system. Ruined the story.

Cool background, revenge, restored body. Cool. Stupid system... what a shame. Ruined the story, getting 'characters' makes the world feel hollow, having a bunch of stuff given to him is pointless. Guy struggled to become OP yet now you've mary sued him its making him boring.

Grow up. Its pathetic.

10 chapters in and the numbers already slipping. 15 minutes for what? Shaved 20% of the hp instantly.

I'll give context, the way its written it bad english. The tenses are all over the place and it doesnt flow well.

Pointless? all that baffle for what just to kill him anyway? Why did she say yes? Should could of just had an anbu go and off him. Why risk so much? Why panic the village, why trick her own ninja, why risk the villages nine tails.

Literal children flirting? Bro.

Kingdom building is boring to read. May as well go read a wiki page.

Skipped that entire arc.

Its very generic for this type of story. Theres no cool stat system or magic system. The actual mechanics of the game aren't fleshed out. Damage, items, stats etc... all boil down to deal X% of hp dmg to enemy which makes every type of fight super generic and boring. Is he getting stronger? no idea. Characters, main characters is ok. Likeable I guess but doesn't stand out. Side characters may as well not exist they're barely mentioned and up to now have barely any personality. Im 100 chapters in and theres no actual development at all. The quality is not good, the writing format reminds me of reading a wiki than an actual story. Its very copy and paste. There are entire chapters where literally nothing happens but the author copy and pastes the same 'fight' 5 times to show the main character killed 5 mobs. Its so boring to read, i actually just skip most of them now. MC dodges and hits deals X% of hp dmg, fatal strike, critical strike etc.... Game doesn't even explain what they actually mean because the power of attacks arent explained and the system does not make sense. The story itself follows clichés, generic stuff for this type of novel. Nothing really special about it. Honestly the novel is very mid at most. Wouldn't really recommend especially because its a paid novel. There are much better novels of this genre out there, which much more interesting characters and world building.

Wow, what a waste of time. Can tell this is a translated novel. The amount of useless words in here is staggering.

Meh its was too soon for some unrealistic info dump of some very basic 'plot'. Just introduce more of the game, side characters etc... first.

Its unreadable. One of the worst written fics ive seen. Reads like a crack fic despite it not trying to be. Guy has not discovered apostrophise so thinks using colons for talking is appropriate. Honestly why even put this trash up.

Thanks i'll give it a miss then.

Im sorry the writing is horrible. Its unreadable. Is this even English? It doesn't read at all. Couldn't get through more than a few chapters. Never seen such horrible flow in a story before.