ShadowSpikeLion

the idea for this story is great and I really enjoyed the parts I could understand but the grammar is very poor and in every chapter you feel like your deciphering the text to read the story I'll come back if it's ever edited though

if your looking for a fantasy fulfillment fanfic where the mc screws everyone he sees this is a good story for you. the idea of the story was good but so much potential was wasted by skipping 13 years in between chapter1 and 2. wish you luck just not my cup of tea

author please keep this concept it's an interesting twist that I wasn't expecting it brought my interest back to your story

I'm pretty sure this is supposed to be the final chapter

great start can't wait for more chapters

hey author I'm sorry that you were no longer having fun with this story as it is one of the best I have read so if your reading this chin up you have alot of talent you just need confidence

not even going to bother reading it now and just an FYI the creator of akame ga kill can sue you now since you are profiting off a world he or she created

I'll be honest I love the idea of this story the main problem I have is what is happening. you can understand snippets here and there to get the idea of what is going on in a scene but there isn't cohesion between scenes not counting the constant switching from Chinese to English names. if you can go through it and rewrite it to where a whole chapter is legible I would be happy to reread it and give a great review.

normally I don't post reviews and I will say I only got to chapter 34 before I couldn't take the dark emo naruto. for specifics it was mentioned early in the story that when naruto's soul was merged with the new inhabitants the emotions of narutos would carry over yet anyone who seems to show even slight hatred he shows killingng intent. as for Sakura yes it can be argued she is a bitch especially early in shipuden but there is a bond between her and naruto. basically what I'm saying is the author turned naruto into an emo who cares about no one but himself and hinata

I think he should join 13 to prevent lieutenant Shiba from dying