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OutsideYourDoor2yrCommentedCh 448 The First Class (1)- OutsideYourDoor2yrReplied to Avan
- OutsideYourDoor2yrCommented
Where is the cuck author at? I want to reply to his comment by calling him a cuck.
"Here let me help you," the acolyte said, offering a hand to help Emery up his feet. "Are you a first year like me? Call me Fatty. What about you? What's your name?" - OutsideYourDoor2yrCommented
Did people back in 85 BC even know what "trillion" was?
Minerva raised one hand and the wind around the whole room stirred. Trails of wind around headed to Minerva and converged into her hand. Wind wasn't usually visible, but there it was, a large sphere of wind spinning at the top of her hand. She casually explained, "Magus, sorcerer, witch, magician, wizard, shaman, warlock, element weaver, etc. These are all different terms for different worlds but all pertain to the same thing. People who have talents in wielding the universe's primordial energy around them. There are trillions of people in existence throughout our galaxy but only hundreds of thousands have the ability to handle the universe's power. And as you all can see, I am wielding the wind's energy." - OutsideYourDoor2yrReplied to Worn_out_by
Eh, wasn't that the age people got married back then anyway? Wait was marriage even a thing back then? They might've just cohabitated without any kind of ceremony... I'm not much for history so idk.
"If that's the case, then listen when a beautiful woman is talking to you, understood!" said Klea in a sharp tone, but it was still like a melody to the ears. - OutsideYourDoor2yrCommented
So we now know that the Author is a cuck. I shall refer to the Author as "cuck" from this point onward.
For a moment, his father pondered something before taking another sip of his ale and said, "Okay... Tomorrow. I'll tell you tomorrow. It's already late now, you should get some sleep." - OutsideYourDoor2yrCommented
Wouldn't it be better to manipulate the person you have blackmail on? I'm confused. If you are going to write a period drama, you need to at least follow the period. I'm certain there is sucking up to royalty back in this time period, but this man clearly has more nefarious plans. It would be much better to use them as a scapegoat than to give them an alibi.
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Yeah, because if he did, his head would probably become acquainted with a whicker basket.
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Yet apparently unworthy of having a name.
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Is this chapter relevant in the story in any meaningful way? Because it completely ruins the interest I had from the first chapter. I don't understand why Authors try and be fancy when they are unskilled. Just follow a plotline, stop trying to do stuff you aren't able to do properly.
Ch 2 Emery - OutsideYourDoor2yrCommentedCh 433 Sealing (3)
- OutsideYourDoor2yrReplied to Silent_Solidarity
since when does the cuck author use common sense?
The lightning technique was called Thunder Gloves, the technique involves coating the hands with lightning to attack. It's a close combat technique. The Earth technique was called Shattered Rocks, it's a long range attack. Although Grey preferred close combat due to his training, having an added attack option was good. - OutsideYourDoor2yrReplied to Voided_Sun
i know right, it's obvious he got it from the cuck authors plotarmor.
That was not the only surprise he got from the chaos space, he also got the method on fusing elements. But he hadn't tried it since he got it. If it's not done properly, there was danger involved. He also got a cultivation technique from it, which was better than the one he got from the Academy. - OutsideYourDoor2yrCommentedCh 407 A Spontaneous Confession
- OutsideYourDoor2yrCommentedCh 396 Clash of Spells
- OutsideYourDoor2yrPosted
I want to give this novel a good review, but I can't really do that. I refuse to pad my review to make someone feel better. Author, your premise is decent. I can clearly see from the dialogue that you have a plot planned and there's a deep story being written. The problem that I'm having is that there isn't enough. At some point between conceptualization and actualization your story falls short. We can clearly tell that there's a story behind all the numbers that you want to invent, but the story isn't coming through well enough. While reading this novel, I felt like I was in a cellphone with spotty service. Sometimes it would be there, and other times it would be missing. You're not transitioning your thought processes enough to allow the story to flow properly. It's all jerky and uncoordinated. I feel like for every two or three plot devices, there's only half or less than half of the amount of world building that's required being put in. Sometimes your characters introduce things with zero Segway into them. No build up, no explanation. It's a random thing throw into the middle of a scene that is supposedly used to transition into another scene, the problem is that there's no transition. It feels shoddy.
- OutsideYourDoor2yrCommented
Why is the word Vixen censored?
"Of course, I am also one of the student council members, I should follow the rules." Tasha was the same. She was cursing in her heart. 'You think I don't know that you're investigating my brother and me? Damn you, V*xen.' - OutsideYourDoor2yrCommented
You must be this old to use this sentence.
"Ara ara, I heard something interesting. In a case like that, you need a member of the student council to observe it and the approval of the student council president, which is me." A soft voice was heard from another direction.