Good starting. like how the mc is not a downer and is trying to adapt there. Is it Enid or wednesday? ahhh both :)

yeah all I feel is bad for the grandma now. all alone. feels like it is her fault he died. she probably going to suicide now.

honestly, this novel is not good. the system does not help anyone. it is just nonsense . it is a waste of time and not a good novel.

started off really good. The chapters were long, and it was fresh, funny, and good character building. then when the chapters get shorter, it is like another writer takes over. it gets boring. he just suddenly does not care about his family. He honestly has not done anything to help. Stopped the execution but did nothing. There just seems to be a lot of filler chapters. he got raped randomly. make no sense. the mc started of loving life with his siblings. training getting stronger. then suddenly he does not think he has a place in the world and is fine watching things go by. It is clear this is probably going to get dropped soon because the writing quality has turned worse

Honestly, chapter and way too short. my review of this fanfiction has more words than the actual fanfiction. it is not fleshed out at all and just seems to be nonsense. i love when new writes come in and give it a go. but this is obviously the guy not even spending ten minutes thinking about it.

the grammar is terrible. The author keeps getting the genders wrong. keeps writing she for a male, it get very confusing. unless this is fixed it should not have be put out for english people.

thanks for advice :) Will defs do that.

Don't hate the fleur route and she could give more to the story.

don't hate the Hermione route but it has been done to death. But I also hate Ron with her :P

would of been a fine story without a summoning system. like seriously? it is stupid to have it in the Pokemon world. it is forced. at least with HP magic it cause still be used but summoning people is just stupid.

Does not Look to bad. need work Good luck! .... .... ..... ...... .........,..........,.............. ...... ........... ................. .............